The reading and lecture both discuss the challenges of Mars trip. While the reading provides three limitations of this trip, the professor refutes, saying none of these claims are convincing and he provides three solutions.
Firstly, the reading avers that there is no enough capacity to bring all the essentials elements into Mars like food and oxygen. On the other hand, the professor argues this notion saying that they can use hydroponic technique. So, they can grow plants in water in very limited space. As a result, they get get their food supply. Moreover, they can get the recycle water from this hydroponic technique as a drinking water. Furthermore, the plants take the carbon dioxide and these plants release oxygen. So, they can get oxygen to breath on Mars surface.
In addition, the article mentions that they can not spent long time on negative gravity on Mars. This is because this negative gravity affect the bones density. However, the professor questions this idea by pointing out that there was a lot of space trips before and they could stand for many months in negative gravity. Moreover, they can select several techniques to avoid that. For instance, they can practice exercises and they can take vitamins and calcium to decrease the deterioration in bone density.
Finally, The reading states that there was a harmful radiations on Mars. So, they cannot stand over there. Nevertheless, the professor contradicts this idea by explaining that these radiations on Mars are not dangerous all time. In fact, they can take tools with them as a protection from these radiations. For example, they can take light equipment like sheilds . Moreover, at the time of harmful radiations they can get under theses sheilds. So, they can get protected from any bad radiations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 304, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: get
...n very limited space. As a result, they get get their food supply. Moreover, they can g...
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Line 3, column 406, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'drinking water'.
Suggestion: drinking water
...water from this hydroponic technique as a drinking water. Furthermore, the plants take the carbo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'spend'
Suggestion: spend
... the article mentions that they can not spent long time on negative gravity on Mars. ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'bones'' or 'bone's'?
Suggestion: bones'; bone's
...ecause this negative gravity affect the bones density. However, the professor questio...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 54, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'radiation'?
Suggestion: radiation
...reading states that there was a harmful radiations on Mars. So, they cannot stand over the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 363, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ey can take light equipment like sheilds . Moreover, at the time of harmful radiat...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 295.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08474576271 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52807464916 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525423728814 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 3.25607064018 338% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 21.2450331126 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2831757971 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.4285714286 110.228320801 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0476190476 21.698381199 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.3589403974 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 53.8541721854 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.0289183223 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.59 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.498013245 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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