TPO-50 - Integrated Writing Task: Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth

The reading and the lecturer both are about the possibility of sending humans to Mars. The reading states several problems in this regard. However, the lecturer casts doubts on the problems mentioned in the reading by providing three strong reasons.

Firstly, the reading material says that traveling to Mars takes at least 2 years; thus, humans will not be able to carry enough food supply, oxygen, and water to Mars. In contrast, the professor rejects this idea. She believes that astronauts can use hydroponics technique in order to plant vegetables in water instead of soil. Also, they can use this technique to transform carbon dioxide into oxygen for breathing. Therefore, they will not have such problems.

Secondly, the author claims that astronauts face a lot of problems in zero-gravity condition on Mars such as reducing muscle mass and bone capacity. Nevertheless, the lecturer challenges this point. She states that astronauts spend several months in space stations, before; therefore, they learned how to deal with these problems by doing some techniques such as specific exercises. Hence, they will not have problems with this matter.

Finally, the reading believes that space radiation on Mars would have harmful effects on humans due to the absence of the magnetic field and creating a shield for spacecraft would increase its weight. Nonetheless. the professor refutes this problem. She claims that apace radiation does not present all the time. This occurs occasionally; thus, astronauts can monitor radiations and use an unshielded spacecraft; but when they see radiations, use a shield. Hence, the weight of the spacecraft would not be a problem.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nonetheless,
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, at least, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1414.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 265.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3358490566 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6803080539 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566037735849 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.4171450331 49.2860985944 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1764705882 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5882352941 21.698381199 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94117647059 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0705556300083 0.272083759551 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0236820883204 0.0996497079465 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329189739488 0.0662205650399 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0448403011481 0.162205337803 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00653019710094 0.0443174109184 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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