tpo 53
The material discusses the concept of increasing the taxes on cigarettes and other unhealthy food. While the reading looks at the topic from one perspective the listening challenges certain points outlined in the reading passage.
Firstly, the reading details specific points regarding this topic, namely increase taxes on cigarettes and unhealthy could encourage people to reduce their consumption of these stuffs. Next, it is financially fair, because these people who do unhealthy behaviors usually need more medical service. Finally, the government can use these taxes in other public projects.
Conversely, the listening challenges the points, one specific contradiction is increase taxes on cigarettes could push people to buy cheaper and lower quality ones, which have more harmful substances with high risk of heart diseases. Furthermore, increase taxes on unhealthy foods does not mean that people stop buying these foods, but they will have less money left for healthy food. In addition to that, people who buy cigarettes may be high or restricted income, therefore increasing taxes could be unfair for those with low income; given that it will be much greater burden for people with low income. One final point, using these taxes in other projects will make the government depend on it, which discourage government to band unhealthy behaviors, such as smoking in open parks. Because government does not want to lose those income.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 100, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...on cigarettes and other unhealthy food. While the reading looks at the topic from one...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 786, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...haviors, such as smoking in open parks. Because government does not want to lose those ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 827, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this income' or 'those incomes'?
Suggestion: this income; those incomes
...ecause government does not want to lose those income.
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, may, regarding, therefore, while, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1220.0 1373.03311258 89% => OK
No of words: 225.0 270.72406181 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42222222222 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58181293371 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595555555556 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 370.8 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9714584947 49.2860985944 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9 7.06452816374 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.2367328918 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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