TPO 55 Writing 1
Because of climate change, more and more land that was once used to grow crops or provide food for animals is turning to dry, unusable desert land. There are many proposals about how to stop this process, known as desertification. A number of proposals involve growing trees, because trees can help protect soil and provide many other benefits to fight against desertification. Some scientists have proposed that the best way to grow trees in dry areas in danger of desertification is by using a box-shaped device surrounding the young tree. The device collects water that condenses from vapor in the atmosphere and helps the tree to grow. However, other scientists believe that this device will not be successful in fighting against desertification for the following reasons.
First, at a cost of 25 U S. dollars each, the device would make growing trees a prohibitively expensive process. Meaningful efforts to fight desertification involve growing millions of trees. Some countries most affected by desertification cannot afford to buy devices for millions of trees
Second, plans for fighting desertification involve asking local people to install and maintain the devices. People living in some of the areas most affected by desertification work long days in harsh conditions: sometimes barely managing to provide food for their families. It would be difficult to motivate these people to look after trees that cannot serve as a source of food for them.
Third, the device's ability to collect and conserve water is limited. Each one provides only enough water to keep a small tree alive. Trees that have outgrown the device have to deal with unforgiving environmental conditions on their own. In some places where the devices are being tried, six months can pass without a drop of rain. Once the trees become too big for the device, they may not be able to survive in such a harsh environment.
Both the reading and lecture discuss about using a box-shaped device in order to control desertification that is due to climate change. The author believes that the approach is not applicable; however, the speaker refutes the author's reasons by explaining some convincing causes.
First of all, the passage claims that the cost of using box devices is high because a 25 US. dollars needs for each tree and this amount is high when we want to apply one device for myriad trees. Nevertheless, the lecturer rejects the claim by discussing about reusability of the tool. She says that after growing each tree, we can remove the box and add it to another tree. Actually, each box device can be used twenty times that reduce the cost. As a result, the technique is reasonable by considering reusing the box.
Secondly, the passage talks about the fact that local people may not give permission to add the box devices because they use the lands for cultivation and providing necessary foods for their families. In this regard, the speaker although accepts the text's concern, she says the technique is applicable by motivating the farmers. To motivate them, we can use box devices for other plants too. Therefore, it is helpful for farmers to provide more water for cultivation. Moreover, the branches of the grown trees can be used to supply more fire woods for peasants. In other words, the approach is rewarding for farmers that will convince them in order to cooperate in this way.
Finally, the reading explains that the device has a limitation in conserving water because it is not usable for old trees. Nonetheless, the professor illustrates another aspect that rebuts the text's claim. She says that the old trees do not need the box for finding water. Indeed, when a tree uses the box devices during its youth, the tree roots go beneath the soil. So, after having deep roots, the tree can find the water independently without needing the device. For example, in the Sahara desert, 90 percent of the trees which used the box devices are alive for several years. Therefore, the text's claim is not important.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1373.03311258 127% => OK
No of words: 360.0 270.72406181 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85833333333 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51770122224 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 145.348785872 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 419.366225166 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2999152212 49.2860985944 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2857142857 110.228320801 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2380952381 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.444515522188 0.272083759551 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13074618922 0.0996497079465 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0841934957474 0.0662205650399 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262183511901 0.162205337803 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842452186079 0.0443174109184 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.3589403974 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 63.6247240618 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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