TPO27 - Integrated TOEFL essay

In this set of materials, the reading passage states that there are several possible causes which produced the little ice age in many part of the world. However, the lecturer finds all the idea out of date and provides some evidence to refute them all. He believes that scientists discovered new information regarding the change of climate.

First of all, the author of the passage claims that disrupting of ocean currents may send a large amount of cold fresh water into the Gulf Stream. In contrast, the lecturer argues that the Gulf Stream can affect Europe and North America. This reason cannot support the cause of the little ice age in New Zealand and South Africa. Hence, it is not the main and convincing reason.

Furthermore, it is mentioned in the reading passage that the phenomenon is because of volcanic eruption and its sulfur gas. On the contrary, the lecturer contends that a strong eruption is necessary for this effect which is distinguishable by vision. People must see brown sky and colorful clouds but nobody report it. So, regular volcanic eruptions are not enough to produce this effect.

Finally, the reading passage asserts that human populations decreased dramatically in the past due to warfare and disease which increased forest trees. Conversely, the lecturer illustrates that trees need a long time to grow and after a short time human populations started to increase and counteract the effect. Since they cut down woods again to plant crops, forest trees could not absorb significant amount of carbon dioxide. In fact, this event is not a logical consequence of decreases in human populations.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun part seems to be countable; consider using: 'many parts'.
Suggestion: many parts
...es which produced the little ice age in many part of the world. However, the lecturer fin...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'conversely', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'so', 'in contrast', 'in fact', 'first of all', 'on the contrary']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.262626262626 0.261695866417 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.131313131313 0.158904122519 83% => OK
Adjectives: 0.117845117845 0.0723426182421 163% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0505050505051 0.0435111971325 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.023569023569 0.0277247811725 85% => OK
Prepositions: 0.121212121212 0.128828473217 94% => OK
Participles: 0.013468013468 0.0370669169778 36% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.60237386753 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.020202020202 0.0208969081088 97% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.114478114478 0.128158765124 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.016835016835 0.0158828679856 106% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.010101010101 0.0114777025283 88% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1632.0 1645.83664459 99% => OK
No of words: 269.0 271.125827815 99% => OK
Chars per words: 6.06691449814 6.08160592843 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.04852973271 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.390334572491 0.374372842146 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.271375464684 0.287516216867 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.182156133829 0.187439937562 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.100371747212 0.113142543107 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60237386753 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 145.348785872 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620817843866 0.539623497131 115% => OK
Word variations: 68.4182286306 53.8517498576 127% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0529801325 115% => OK
Sentence length: 17.9333333333 21.7502111507 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6540570445 49.3711431718 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8 132.220823453 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9333333333 21.7502111507 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.878197800319 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.39072847682 29% => OK
Readability: 45.0708798017 50.5018328374 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.93442622951 1.90840788429 101% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.608468614278 0.549887131256 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.117223459398 0.142949733639 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0841833439942 0.0787303798458 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.539731175196 0.631733273073 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.136074775006 0.139662658121 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.241560344434 0.266732575781 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131437539807 0.103435571967 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.385107923862 0.414875509568 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.104253657278 0.0530846634433 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.430185421869 0.40443939384 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10807786387 0.0528353158467 205% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.26048565121 164% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.62251655629 110% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 3.1766004415 126% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 10.2958057395 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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flaws:
Double check books how to use 'due to' and 'because of'

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 12
No. of Words: 269 250
No. of Characters: 1326 1200
No. of Different Words: 162 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.05 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.929 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.539 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.651 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.531 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.058 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4