XX_Azad
The author provides some explanations about the impossibility of sending humans to Mars. However, the lecturer asserts that scientists have found solutions for the problems provided in the reading passage.
First, the author states that trip to Mars lasts for about two years, and the astronauts need oxygen, water, and food; but the cargo capacity is limited to carry enough food, water, and oxygen for two years. On the other hand, the lecturer argues that astronauts can use hydroponics technique to produce water, oxygen, and food. Hydroponics is a method to grow plants in water instead of soil. After growing plants, they can provide enough food also they can recycle waste water to produce clean water. Furthermore, they absorb carbon dioxide and release oxygen. So, food, oxygen, and water can be provided for astronauts accordingly.
Second, the writer remarks that the zero-gravity environment can harm the astronauts by reducing muscle mass and lowering bone density. However, the speaker asserts that astronauts attended many different trips, so they have learned to overcome these problems. In fact, they know regular exercises can help them to maintain their muscle mass; besides, they may consume vitamins and minerals such as calcium to preserve their bone density.
Finally, the author states that astronauts would be exposed to dangerous space radiation that could be harmful for them. Furthermore, making and using a protective shield is not possible since it would add too much weight to the ship. Conversely, the lecturer points out that radiations emitted from the Sun are not always dangerous. In fact, dangerous levels of radiation are emitted during the most active times of the Sun. So, the astronauts may use a special device to monitor harmful radiations, and when this device detects harmful radiations, astronauts can use a small and lightweight shield. In addition, they can continue their trip without using the shield when the device does not detect detrimental radiation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 191, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...peaker asserts that astronauts attended many different trips, so they have learned to overcome...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, in addition, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1706.0 1373.03311258 124% => OK
No of words: 318.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36477987421 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58114808986 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572327044025 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 419.366225166 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.51434878587 462% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8212120521 49.2860985944 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.352941176 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7058823529 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94117647059 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.3589403974 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.2367328918 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 63.6247240618 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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