Young people enjoy their life more than older people do.
Some people assume that youth enjoy their life more that older people do. From my perspective, I am positive that young individuals do take pleasure in life more than old ones because they have no responsibilities thus a myriad of time to spent on their own and strong health.
First of all, I’d like to point out that young individuals do their best to saturate their life as much as possible in order to have memorable thoughts. As they haven’t any responsibilities they spend their time on hobbies or entertainment like theme parties. For example, my sister Mila who is 19 has really busy and exciting life. After coming home from college she with enthusiasm goes skiing and roller-skating. As Mila is so addicted to these two activities, engagement in it grants her all positive emotions and a desire to be the best among others. On the other hand, there is an opinion that only old people know a truly value of life. It’s naturally true about experience or some situations but as for entertainment it is not. Just because they have work responsibilities or taking care of their children thus they simply don’t have any time to amuse themselves.
Moreover, youth is all about healthy body and well-being. Juveniles have enough strength to try themselves in extreme kind of sport like parachute jump or diving. It’s a widespread fact that extreme awakes fear which in consequence influences nervous system and heart. From this reasons old men can’t afford to do it as it is simply health hazard for them. But young people actively take advantage of their good well-being. They eager to take up parachute jump which gives them incomparable emotions for a long time or opportunity to see the marvelous underwater world. So, in one word people should have not only desire but a good health as well in order to enjoy a life.
As I have illustrated above, young people have more opportunities to relax and even to see the marvels as they don’t have workload and health problems.
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 70
- It is more important to keep your old friends than to make new friends. 70
- Young people enjoy their life more than older people do. 80
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they have no responsibilities thus a myriad of time to spent on their own and strong health.
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has really busy and exciting life.
has a really busy and exciting life.
They eager to take up parachute jump
They are eager to take up parachute jump
Sentence: From this reasons old men can't afford to do it as it is simply health hazard for them.
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