In some cities there is a law against making noises at night such as loud music or TV. Some people support this while others do not. What is your opinion?
As a development of technology, we can access to music players and other multimedia devices easily. Furthermore, in urbanization life style we should show respect to other people. Some people, especially young men, make noise at night which bother other people. And in some cities there is a law against these immoral activities. All the people are unanimous on the significance of making noise annoyed people where some of them embrace some laws against these activities and others think this is not necessary is still a moot point of a matter of discussion. However conventional, I am personally of the caution that in all cities must have this law and also laws like this.
First, because of annoying of loud sounds and some people do not pay any attention to their neighbors for example maybe in an apartment someone like that sleep early such as 9 p.m. and high volume of music player do not allow them to sleep, and their neighborhood have party or any ceremony like this that people usually paly music on it and making noise for them, so they should can complain to police to come there and be them quiet.
Second, because of difference of personal taste when someone play music loudly, maybe his neighbor do not like that and he or she should hear the music that he or she be in disgust from that. For example I do not like heavy metal music and my neighbor paly a music of “Mahtabe khafane” group that is a popular musical group in Iran, so it makes me so furious and there is no law that I could complain from him.
Additionally, there is a law that is say to do not making loud sound around hospital because it is harmful for sickness man. It would be some people in house that they are sick and maybe they shocked with noises. For example pregnant women when hear noises they secrete some hormones that is harmful for their babies.
By the following reasons, I think that is necessary to enact laws that against from activities such as making noise and something like that to protected people from annoying of others and we have a healthy and safety society.
and others think this is not necessary is still a moot point of a matter of discussion.
Description: what is the verb for the second 'is'? can you re-write this sentence?
someone like that sleep early
someone like that sleeps early
and their neighborhood have party
and their neighborhoods have party
so they should can complain to police
so they should complain to police
Sentence: Second, because of difference of personal taste when someone play music loudly, maybe his neighbor do not like that and he or she should hear the music that he or she be in disgust from that.
Description: The fragment someone play music is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace play with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Sentence: Additionally, there is a law that is say to do not making loud sound around hospital because it is harmful for sickness man.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and say
Sentence: It would be some people in house that they are sick and maybe they shocked with noises.
Description: The fragment they shocked with is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace shocked with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Sentence: For example pregnant women when hear noises they secrete some hormones that is harmful for their babies.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
Sentence: By the following reasons, I think that is necessary to enact laws that against from activities such as making noise and something like that to protected people from annoying of others and we have a healthy and safety society.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and protected
Sentence: First, because of annoying of loud sounds and some people do not pay any attention to their neighbors for example maybe in an apartment someone like that sleep early such as 9 p.m. and high volume of music player do not allow them to sleep, and their neighborhood have party or any ceremony like this that people usually paly music on it and making noise for them, so they should can complain to police to come there and be them quiet.
Error: paly Suggestion: play
Sentence: For example I do not like heavy metal music and my neighbor paly a music of Mahtabe khafane group that is a popular musical group in Iran, so it makes me so furious and there is no law that I could complain from him.
Error: paly Suggestion: play
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No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
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