Is it better to enjoy your money when you earn it or is it better to save your money for some time in the future? Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion.
We will never know to appreciate our money unless we make it by ourselves. Some people would waste their money when they earn it while others wisely save their money for some time in the future. I am of the latter opinion that we ought to save our money rather than spend it. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, our savings may come in handy when we start a family in the future. Starting a family is a big decision for everyone and it requires both mental strength and importantly, a strong financial support. Some young and inexperienced young people have the thought that the fundamental part of a family is love and relationship between parents and children. That being said, they must take into account numerous bills and many other expenses that they have to pay when they are having a family. My parents’ experience is a good example to illustrate this. Both of my father and mother have been independent since they were young so they didn’t want to ask for our grandparents’ money or any kind of financial support when they moved in with each other. They used their hard-earned money that they had saved to pay for their wedding and bought a nice house in the central city to bring me and my brother up. They once told me that saving money was the best decision they had ever made.
Furthermore, health care is requiring more and more money. Young people, who are often healthy and not prone to chronic illness, don’t bother about health care very much. Not until they get old will they realize healthcare really matters to them and they have to pay a lot for it. Although there are policies and health insurances to aid people with the healthcare’s expenses, the cost of health care is still very. For instance, when my grandfather came down with the life-threatening lung cancer, it cost my family an arm and a leg to pay all the hospital’s bills for him. The chemotherapies and radiotherapies that my grandfather had to undergo were so expensive that we have to borrow all of our relatives’ money. My father didn’t want to rely too much on others and be an intolerable burden for his family so he contributed his life-long savings to take care of all the required payment. Thankfully, my grandfather was treated thoroughly and still lives happily with us.
In conclusion, I truly believe that we should save our money instead of spending it right after we earned it. This is because we have a lot of payment to make when starting a family and our savings will be a life savor when we get old and have to pay for our health care. In addition, saving money helps us to become more responsible.
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... the best decision they had ever made. Furthermore, health care is requiri...
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...ughly and still lives happily with us. In conclusion, I truly believe that...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'for instance', 'i feel', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'kind of', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.196116504854 0.229887763892 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.172815533981 0.158761421928 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0757281553398 0.0866891130778 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0543689320388 0.046263068375 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.126213592233 0.0685040099705 184% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.106796116505 0.118717715034 90% => OK
Participles: 0.0233009708738 0.0351676179071 66% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60899867734 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0388349514563 0.0309702414327 125% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0776699029126 0.0887237588012 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0174757281553 0.0209618222197 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0174757281553 0.0139019557991 126% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2714.0 2387.08602151 114% => OK
No of words: 479.0 408.028673835 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66597077244 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.27139874739 0.338922669872 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.187891440501 0.251872472559 75% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.123173277662 0.174417080927 71% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0835073068894 0.112833075102 74% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60899867734 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503131524008 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 58.4831580623 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.8260869565 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8340128813 48.84282405 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 120.699889404 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8260869565 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.608695652174 0.644075263715 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 39.6152310066 45.7405998639 87% => OK
Elegance: 0.923076923077 1.45489161554 63% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357840661909 0.300154397459 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0945603425055 0.103427244359 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0644170230793 0.0752933317313 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.458382915352 0.497263757937 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.125837151498 0.151897553556 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132698278713 0.114077575197 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555153032054 0.0781384742642 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.377936724625 0.336927656856 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.085852258394 0.067059652881 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271936832198 0.210909579961 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436861354616 0.0618886996521 71% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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