Do you agree or disagree with the following statment? Should governments spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics?
Arts is necessary for our lives. It develops our spirit, our bodies and our mind. Without it, life will be definitely no colorful and meaningless. Hence, it is our government taking the duty for spending money in support of arts more than athletics. Arts is valuable treasure for every country, arts is the civilization of product , and what's important, it is the beauty in daily life.
First of all, every country has different kinds of arts. For china, it has been developed for water ink picture for many centuries. It features simple color of black and white. Instead of depicting subject concretely, the artists illustrates with abstract painting. This kind of art takes thousand of hundred years to be mature, which become a symbol of a country. For example, I have been going to National Palace Museum several times. National Palace Museum as a top museum in the world, it display various treasure of past china's dynasties. Because of its importance, visitors such as U.S come from the world just taking a look. They all admire that the beauty of pictures are rarely seen in other civilizations.
As mention above ,because arts is the civilized product of every country.As a country , how can you tell other countries what is your feature?And what is the difference between you and others? I think that arts is the thing that make us different from other countries. For example, I once going abroad being an exchange student, and there are various students coming from different countries. To stand out in students, i introduce our arts, mentioning some excellent artists that compete Monet and many more western artists in the history. By doing so, every student is impressive about our culture and our arts.
The last point is that arts is indispensible for our daily lives. Designing for a building or decorating for our gardens and so on, arts makes our lives more colorful and bring happiness to everyone. For example, the architecture in Taiwan is composed of three color, that is grey, black and white. Hence, when I see building with painting in street arts style or abstract feature, my heart seems to shine into sunlight.
All in all, arts is every countries’ treasure, a symbolic of civilization and necessity for lighting mood of everyone. Therefore, it is our government’s responsibility for pouring in more money than athletics.
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Essay evaluation report
Arts is valuable treasure
Arts is a valuable treasure
the artists illustrates with abstract painting.
the artists illustrate with abstract painting.
it display various treasure
it displays various treasures
the beauty of pictures are rarely seen in other civilizations.
the beauties of pictures are rarely seen in other civilizations.
arts makes our lives more colorful and bring happiness to everyone.
arts makes our lives more colorful and brings happiness to everyone.
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.88 21.0
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Still you will need to argue why not 'in support of athletics'. Try this pattern:
Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree. (suppose we support side A)
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3: Second, reason 2, blabla... do the same thing as First
Para 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. first,....second...However, there is no causation/relation... Still I support side A, ...first,....second...
Para 5: Conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1894 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.771 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.583 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.88 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.082 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.48 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.473 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
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...try, arts is the civilization of product , and whats important, it is the beauty i...
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Line 1, column 338, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
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Line 3, column 290, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...stract painting. This kind of art takes thousand of hundred years to be mature, which be...
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Line 3, column 494, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'displays'?
Suggestion: displays
...Museum as a top museum in the world, it display various treasure of past chinas dynasti...
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Suggestion: ,
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Line 5, column 420, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...nt countries. To stand out in students, i introduce our arts, mentioning some exc...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'hence', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'i think', 'kind of', 'such as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.273333333333 0.229887763892 119% => OK
Verbs: 0.135555555556 0.158761421928 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0844444444444 0.0866891130778 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0288888888889 0.046263068375 62% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0688888888889 0.0685040099705 101% => OK
Prepositions: 0.137777777778 0.118717715034 116% => OK
Participles: 0.0422222222222 0.0351676179071 120% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.74059131038 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0111111111111 0.0309702414327 36% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00222222222222 0.00188951952338 118% => OK
Determiners: 0.0711111111111 0.0887237588012 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00444444444444 0.0209618222197 21% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0177777777778 0.0139019557991 128% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2370.0 2387.08602151 99% => OK
No of words: 396.0 408.028673835 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.98484848485 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.348484848485 0.338922669872 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.272727272727 0.251872472559 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.199494949495 0.174417080927 114% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.118686868687 0.112833075102 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74059131038 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55303030303 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 63.3433592863 59.2087087015 107% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.84 20.5533526081 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5713592656 48.84282405 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8 120.699889404 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.84 20.5533526081 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.44 0.644075263715 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.54480286738 180% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 43.1127272727 45.7405998639 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.94285714286 1.45489161554 134% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273877747335 0.300154397459 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.111752890977 0.103427244359 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0753638920717 0.0752933317313 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.467363070338 0.497263757937 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123665529276 0.151897553556 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972327930133 0.114077575197 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081013037766 0.0781384742642 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.289495816231 0.336927656856 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0588013310432 0.067059652881 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188137279377 0.210909579961 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040714871891 0.0618886996521 66% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.91756272401 244% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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