"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only parttime. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
The authors argument that Adams realty is more efficient than Fitch realty for home selling is flawed. In the argument, the author draws conclusion from a limited sample to make generalisation about efficient of real estate firms. Based on vague comparisons between two leading firms and says one of them is ineffective one. So, the author doesn't provide any evidences and more similarities to compare firms.
Firstly, author states Adams and Fitch firms are leading among the real estate firms based on few unyielding results. Because, when both firms leads in their field it defines effective working nature of them. By this, author cannot draw a effective comparison and stated it by few of results. For example, Adams firm deals with only rich properties and Fitch firm deals only with mediate properties. Author, doesn't state about their revenues assumptions and exposes the results of work.
Moreover, from author statement Adams firms has 40 real estates and Fetch firm has 25 real estates. Using this data author vaguely states Adams real estate is effective than Fitch, which is a flaw. Adams 40 firms may have more rich clients or dealing with high end properties, Fetch 25 firms may deals with moderate and well stated properties. This terms may vary from one firm to other. Firms their ow protocols to sell a property which varies in time, cost effective and many other factors. So, the larger the firms, the effective work is false.
Main flaw assumption state by author as,10 years ago when author sells a property by Fitch and now sells a property by Adams which is unrealistic to compare for effectiveness. The factors which effect ten years ago definitely varies for current situation. Considering a example as, when first property sells the revenue, size, and any lawsuits were considered which doesn't have for current estate. By missing this important terms the authors draw a conclusion which is undermine whole argument.
Argument can be strengthen by providing statistical terms such as size, invested amount and expected amount, any lawsuit problems exists, the emergency of money for both properties will strengthen the authors argument. But unfortunately author doesn't provide any assertions between them.
Therefore, the argument can be strengthen by considering above examples. The argument could be further strengthened if the author were to define key terms as well as establish a connection between past and current situation. As it stands, however, the argument is flawed for the reasons indicated.
- "Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease i 23
- Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. I diasagree wirh author staement that scands canno't solve our problems because majority of scandals are unwnanted to te p 50
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." 50
- "Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only parttime. More 75
- "According to a recent report by our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies ac 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors argument that Adams realty is more effi...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 341, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...them is ineffective one. So, the author doesnt provide any evidences and more similari...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... firms based on few unyielding results. Because, when both firms leads in their field i...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 238, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...re of them. By this, author cannot draw a effective comparison and stated it by f...
^
Line 3, column 409, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...s only with mediate properties. Author, doesnt state about their revenues assumptions ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 460, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ll a property which varies in time, cost effective and many other factors. So, th...
^^
Line 5, column 543, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... larger the firms, the effective work is false. Main flaw assumption state by ...
^^
Line 7, column 269, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ries for current situation. Considering a example as, when first property sells t...
^
Line 7, column 367, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... and any lawsuits were considered which doesnt have for current estate. By missing thi...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 470, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'undermined'.
Suggestion: undermined
... the authors draw a conclusion which is undermine whole argument. Argument can be stre...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 202, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...for both properties will strengthen the authors argument. But unfortunately author does...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 245, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...hors argument. But unfortunately author doesnt provide any assertions between them. ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 251, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rgument. But unfortunately author doesnt provide any assertions between them. ...
^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'such as', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.296703296703 0.25644967241 116% => OK
Verbs: 0.147252747253 0.15541462614 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0967032967033 0.0836205057962 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0417582417582 0.0520304965353 80% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0197802197802 0.0272364105082 73% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107692307692 0.125424944231 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0395604395604 0.0416121511921 95% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60677291729 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0131868131868 0.026700313972 49% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0835164835165 0.113004496875 74% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0175824175824 0.0255425247493 69% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0197802197802 0.0127820249294 155% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2546.0 2731.13054187 93% => OK
No of words: 408.0 446.07635468 91% => OK
Chars per words: 6.24019607843 6.12365571057 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.377450980392 0.378187486979 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.281862745098 0.287650121315 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.188725490196 0.208842608468 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.129901960784 0.135150697306 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60677291729 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 207.018472906 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.469332199767 107% => OK
Word variations: 55.0832424509 52.1807786196 106% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.039408867 120% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.2022227129 73% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.452328892 57.7814097925 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.083333333 141.986410481 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.2022227129 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.583333333333 0.724660767414 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 3.58251231527 363% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 45.1862745098 51.9672348444 87% => OK
Elegance: 2.12631578947 1.8405768891 116% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322539674839 0.441005458295 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0892920440043 0.135418324435 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0571311836048 0.0829849096947 69% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.488755938025 0.58762219726 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.129093487005 0.147661913831 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100090870484 0.193483328276 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077859158594 0.0970749176394 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.267899334476 0.42659136922 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0631713311046 0.0774707102158 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176169135099 0.312017818177 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117259865775 0.0698173142475 168% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.87684729064 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 5.36822660099 186% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 14.657635468 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
---------------------
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.