"For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony. Last year, however, private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series doubled. The symphony has also announced an increase in ticket prices for next year. Given such developments, some city commissioners argue that the symphony can now be fully self-supporting, and they recommend that funding for the symphony be eliminated from next year's budget."
Some city commissioners believe that Grandview Symphony has able to support itself because of the fact that private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series doubled. However, an unjustified assumption here is that Grandview Symphony already has a decent amount of private contributions and attendance. What if private contributions only a small part of it's revenue? What of attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series was only 10 out of 1000. Even it's private contributions tripled and attendance doubled, the outcome of how much money they gained could still be really less. In this case, the city commissioners need to provide detailed information about how much money they gained this year and how much money it needs to be self-supporting.
Moreover, the city commissioners also mention that the symphony has announced an increase in ticket prices for next year to support the suggestion that Grandview symphony is fully self-supporting right now. However, it is necessary to ask how much money they would increase in ticket prices. It is possible that they only increase one dollar for original 500 dollars ticket. It is also possible that the attendance might decrease after they make this change. It is also possible that the symphony might change it's mind to remain its price. So before making clear of these possibilities, we can not be convinced that the symphony can be fully self-supporting.
Finally, the city commissioners even recommend eliminating the symphony from next year's budget because they believe that symphony can be supported by itself without other help. They assume that these increases will remain or even higher in next year. However, several questions must be answered to determine this assumption is indeed warranted. Would private contributions and attendance still be so impressive for next year? What if some special events happen this year make this difference and these events would not happen next year? Then the symphony would not have same amount of like this year. What if even it can be self-supporting, it still needs money for developing? Therefore, it is kind of narrowly preceived for long view to just eliminate this part from next year's budget
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...iew Symphony has able to support itself because of the fact that private contributions to the symphony i...
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Line 3, column 460, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t decrease after they make this change. It is also possible that the symphony migh...
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Line 5, column 576, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'amounted'.
Suggestion: amounted
...? Then the symphony would not have same amount of like this year. What if even it can ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'therefore', 'kind of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.214833759591 0.25644967241 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.153452685422 0.15541462614 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.104859335038 0.0836205057962 125% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0869565217391 0.0520304965353 167% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0562659846547 0.0272364105082 207% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.120204603581 0.125424944231 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0255754475703 0.0416121511921 61% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.11923348486 2.79052419416 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0230179028133 0.026700313972 86% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0818414322251 0.113004496875 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0332480818414 0.0255425247493 130% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0204603580563 0.0127820249294 160% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2283.0 2731.13054187 84% => OK
No of words: 362.0 446.07635468 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.30662983425 6.12365571057 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.57801047555 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.361878453039 0.378187486979 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.281767955801 0.287650121315 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.21546961326 0.208842608468 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.138121546961 0.135150697306 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11923348486 2.79052419416 112% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 207.018472906 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453038674033 0.469332199767 97% => OK
Word variations: 46.7238455611 52.1807786196 90% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.039408867 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.1 23.2022227129 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0558008985 57.7814097925 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.15 141.986410481 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1 23.2022227129 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.724660767414 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.14285714286 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 46.2767955801 51.9672348444 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.21551724138 1.8405768891 66% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.458569364687 0.441005458295 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.177652280451 0.135418324435 131% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.108615090402 0.0829849096947 131% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.449238882751 0.58762219726 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.108310655484 0.147661913831 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16207034256 0.193483328276 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.147668778636 0.0970749176394 152% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.378253973877 0.42659136922 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.00883100357918 0.0774707102158 11% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.350074394718 0.312017818177 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120706708043 0.0698173142475 173% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.33743842365 132% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.87684729064 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.82512315271 187% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 5.36822660099 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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