Do you agree or disagree with the followingstatement?Universities should give the same amount of money to their students's sports activities as they give to their university libraries.
Some people believe that universities should spend the same amount of
money on their students' sports as they spend on their libraries.
Others would argue that universities should give more money to
their libraries than sport activities. Although a definite decision
cannot be reached easily, in my view, universities should spend
more money on their libraries than sport activities. First, libraries
are the fundemental places for students to get information.
Moreover, it is one of the best options for students to study.
Most importantly, libraries need more money to be kept oprating.
The first reason that I disagree that universities should spend
the same amount of money on sports' activities as they give it to
libraries is that libraries are the most tremendouse place for
students to access the most up-to-date resourses and data bases.
Every year libraries need to be refreshed by new technology and
information because, in 20th century every moment new information
discoveres and those information are neccessary to have been brought
into the our academic systems including libraries in universities.
Additionally, most of the time professors ask their students to go
to libraries to use different types of rare books which cannot be found
anywhere otherwise libraries. In other words, most libraries
are filled with expensive and rare books and this application needs
a lot of money.
Another reason that I disagree that universities should give tha same
amount of money to sports as they give to libraries is that libraries
is one of the most convenience place for students to study
and get together to work in a group. So, it is more logical for
universities to spend more money on their libraries so that they
become comfortable places for students to study. For example,
last winter, I had a difficult exam. I did not have a peacful
place to concentrate on my study. But, the only place that I managed
to get focuse on was my universities' library. It was
quite silent.Additionally, as the university checks up
the library each month,there was nothing wrong with it.Therefore,
if universities spent the same amount of money for sports as they spent
on libraries, they would probably face with the finantial problems
and they would not have more money to specify for libraries.
Most importantly, universities should not give the same amount
of money to spors' activities as they give it to their libraries
because libraries need a lot of money inorder to keep oprating.
For instanse, a library uses electricity and heat.They are open
for long hours. Moreover, a library needs some knowledgable and educated
staff. All of these requierments need money and a lot of money should
be saved for these options. While, sports do not need as much as
money the libraries need.For sports, universities can only buy some
sports' facilities which they do not need a lot of money.
In summary, whether the universities should spend the same amount
of money on sports' activities as they should give it to libraries is
a controversial issue;however, the advantages to spending more money to
libraries seem to outweigh spending that amount of
money on sports.First, libraries need to be filled with new
technology and new books in order to be accessable for students.
Second,libraries provide students with the most comfortable
place in an academic area to study and do teams' projects. Third,
libraries need more money so that they will be kept oprating. Thus, I disagree
that the same amount of money should be spent on sports' activities as it has been
spent on libraries.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: First, libraries are the fundemental places for students to get information.
Error: fundemental Suggestion: fundamental
Sentence: Most importantly, libraries need more money to be kept oprating.
Error: oprating Suggestion: operating
Sentence: The first reason that I disagree that universities should spend the same amount of money on sports' activities as they give it to libraries is that libraries are the most tremendouse place for students to access the most up-to-date resourses and data bases.
Error: tremendouse Suggestion: tremendous
Error: resourses Suggestion: resources
Sentence: Every year libraries need to be refreshed by new technology and information because, in 20th century every moment new information discoveres and those information are neccessary to have been brought into the our academic systems including libraries in universities.
Error: discoveres Suggestion: discovered
Error: neccessary Suggestion: necessary
Sentence: Another reason that I disagree that universities should give tha same amount of money to sports as they give to libraries is that libraries is one of the most convenience place for students to study and get together to work in a group.
Error: tha Suggestion: than
Sentence: I did not have a peacful place to concentrate on my study.
Error: peacful Suggestion: peaceful
Sentence: But, the only place that I managed to get focuse on was my universities' library.
Error: focuse Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: It was quite silent.Additionally, as the university checks up the library each month,there was nothing wrong with it.Therefore, if universities spent the same amount of money for sports as they spent on libraries, they would probably face with the finantial problems and they would not have more money to specify for libraries.
Error: finantial Suggestion: financial
Sentence: Most importantly, universities should not give the same amount of money to spors' activities as they give it to their libraries because libraries need a lot of money inorder to keep oprating.
Error: oprating Suggestion: operating
Error: inorder Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: spors Suggestion: sports
Sentence: For instanse, a library uses electricity and heat.They are open for long hours.
Error: instanse Suggestion: instance
Sentence: Moreover, a library needs some knowledgable and educated staff.
Error: knowledgable Suggestion: knowledgeable
Sentence: All of these requierments need money and a lot of money should be saved for these options.
Error: requierments Suggestion: requirements
Sentence: In summary, whether the universities should spend the same amount of money on sports' activities as they should give it to libraries is a controversial issue;however, the advantages to spending more money to libraries seem to outweigh spending that amount of money on sports.First, libraries need to be filled with new technology and new books in order to be accessable for students.
Error: accessable Suggestion: accessible
Sentence: Third, libraries need more money so that they will be kept oprating.
Error: oprating Suggestion: operating
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2. Don't put a space before punctuation marks. Always put a space after punctuation marks. Essay e-grader is sensitive.
3. No. of Words: 598 while No. of Different Words: 211 //means it is wordy
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 598 350
No. of Characters: 2919 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.945 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.881 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.738 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 186 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 114 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 82 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.92 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.461 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...aries are the most tremendouse place for students to access the most up-to-date r...
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...time professors ask their students to go to libraries to use different types of r...
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...pent on sports activities as it has been spent on libraries.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'third', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'in summary', 'in my view', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.257716049383 0.229887763892 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.16049382716 0.158761421928 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.091049382716 0.0866891130778 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0432098765432 0.046263068375 93% => OK
Pronouns: 0.054012345679 0.0685040099705 79% => OK
Prepositions: 0.135802469136 0.118717715034 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0262345679012 0.0351676179071 75% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.97781753968 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0462962962963 0.0309702414327 149% => OK
Particles: 0.00154320987654 0.00188951952338 82% => OK
Determiners: 0.070987654321 0.0887237588012 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0262345679012 0.0209618222197 125% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00462962962963 0.0139019557991 33% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3649.0 2387.08602151 153% => OK
No of words: 590.0 408.028673835 145% => OK
Chars per words: 6.18474576271 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92848004997 4.48200974243 110% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.338983050847 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.247457627119 0.251872472559 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.210169491525 0.174417080927 120% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.159322033898 0.112833075102 141% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97781753968 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.364406779661 0.524397521467 69% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.4355076351 59.2087087015 73% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 23.6 20.5533526081 115% => OK
Sentence length SD: 89.0177510388 48.84282405 182% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 145.96 120.699889404 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6 20.5533526081 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.644075263715 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 54.0 4.5376344086 1190% => There are something wrong with the essay format.
Language errors: 29.0 5.54480286738 523% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 48.3457627119 45.7405998639 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.62874251497 1.45489161554 112% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.541369092596 0.300154397459 180% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.140056299266 0.103427244359 135% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0959659215626 0.0752933317313 127% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.851347942229 0.497263757937 171% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.227011037657 0.151897553556 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.204469505337 0.114077575197 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144286369222 0.0781384742642 185% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.0773214448112 0.336927656856 23% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0698604128296 0.067059652881 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16289121949 0.210909579961 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109264664111 0.0618886996521 177% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.91756272401 224% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 11.0 2.75985663082 399% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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