Holidays honor people or events. If you could create a new holiday, what person or event would it be honor and how would you want people to celebrate it? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
There are many holidays in the United States that I like such as Independence day, Easter, and Thanksgiving. Holidays bring people together. In my opinion, if I could create a new holiday I would like to create a holiday for people to celebrate older people. It could be a National holiday in which everyone could spend time with elderly people in family or in senior care homes. This holiday would honor older people, let them know that they are appreciated, and raise their self-esteem. I would call it the Senior Day.
To begin with, I strongly believe that older people are important and valuable; they have a lot to share regarding their life experiences. In my personal experience, I have struggled with problems many times in my life that I have shared with my parents or my grandparents. They always gave me useful advice for whatever the situation was based on their own experiences. I think their advice was the greatest assistance to me in making proper decisions in my life.
Furthermore, there are many old people in this country who have been abandoned by family members. Some of these people are sick and they may feel lonely and less important. Seeing this neglect of the elderly is very painful for me. In my native country, Thailand, elderly people are very important and everyone takes good care of their parents and grandparents until they pass away. I think the younger generations should take better care of the older generation.
Finally, because the Senior day would be a National holiday, people would have the day off. People would get together and celebrate the day with the older people in their family or in public places. Senior people would have the privilege of getting many things for free or discounts such as free meals, free movie tickets, and free bus tickets. In senior care homes, people would bring food, music, and fun games to join with them. I think this would make their lives happier.
In conclusion, the Senior Day would be beneficial for many older people in this country. People would get the day off and would have the opportunity to spend time to celebrate senior citizens in their family and publicly. It would make everyone happy and would enrich their lives.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Don't repeat words, phrases and sentences. like 'I think...'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 1785 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.685 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.353 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.565 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.762 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.478 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 54, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., the Senior Day would be beneficial for many older people in this country. Peopl...
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'so', 'i think', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'in my opinion', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236406619385 0.229887763892 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.146572104019 0.158761421928 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.106382978723 0.0866891130778 123% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0307328605201 0.046263068375 66% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0921985815603 0.0685040099705 135% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.108747044917 0.118717715034 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0260047281324 0.0351676179071 74% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.47826853878 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0189125295508 0.0309702414327 61% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.063829787234 0.0887237588012 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0449172576832 0.0209618222197 214% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.00709219858156 0.0139019557991 51% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2220.0 2387.08602151 93% => OK
No of words: 381.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.82677165354 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.328083989501 0.338922669872 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.199475065617 0.251872472559 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.146981627297 0.174417080927 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0866141732283 0.112833075102 77% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47826853878 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464566929134 0.524397521467 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 48.9778227807 59.2087087015 83% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 16.5652173913 20.5533526081 81% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7322942424 48.84282405 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5217391304 120.699889404 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5652173913 20.5533526081 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.478260869565 0.644075263715 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 36.512723953 45.7405998639 80% => OK
Elegance: 1.37719298246 1.45489161554 95% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283386481712 0.300154397459 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.111483433541 0.103427244359 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0800115222666 0.0752933317313 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.489122461347 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.13525460132 0.151897553556 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111095273571 0.114077575197 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810607417954 0.0781384742642 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.345499819662 0.336927656856 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.164936948858 0.067059652881 246% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200152595183 0.210909579961 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103727096531 0.0618886996521 168% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8870967742 151% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 18.0 8.42114695341 214% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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