In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town,we should encourage.Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area.The Hillview landfill which has been undevelopped for decades is a perfect site for this plant.the building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousand of Hillview residents left unemployed after computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year.i am asking the city council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer a significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing.-write an argument task.
The argument states that the Mayor of the city of Hillview is asking the City Council to launch a campaign that will attract the car manufacturing giant, Autotech. According to Mayor this will alleviate the unemployment problem in the town. Although this argument on the face of it seems attractive, there are many underlying assumptions whose authenticity seems to be dubious.
First, there is no reason mentioned for Hillview landfill beind undeveloped since decades. It might be possible that the landfill has issues with the underground drainage, because of which no work has been done on it. There is no reliability that this landfill will be appropriate for the car manufacturing process. Hence, it will be imprudent to take any further steps before doing a thorough investigation regarding the reason for the undevelopment of the landfill.
Secondly, it is mentioned that the Hillview residents were previously employed in a computer software programming company. Autotech, on the other hand, is a car manufacturing company. So, the kind of skills that they will be demanding will be very different from the skills for which the residents were employed before. And naturally, as Autotech is a car manufacturing company, it will be requiring employees who have skill related to manufacturing cars. So the idea of alleviation of umemployement due to Autotech is not very sound.
Also, rather than organizing campaign for Autotech and offering them tax incentives, the City Council should campaign for some other computer software programming company. This will be much more fruitful, as the software company will also be keen in coming to a place where there will be people who already posses the skills the comapny requires. Also, the residents will be getting a benefit, as they will not be required to learn any new skills. This will a faster and more effective way to alleviate the prevailing unemployment.
Therefore, it is evident from the above reasoning that the argument has many loopholes. It would have bolstered the argument if the assumptions regarding the landfill and residents' skills were stated clearly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'kind of', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246684350133 0.25644967241 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.175066312997 0.15541462614 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0636604774536 0.0836205057962 76% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0477453580902 0.0520304965353 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0291777188329 0.0272364105082 107% => OK
Prepositions: 0.106100795756 0.125424944231 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0636604774536 0.0416121511921 153% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9704551577 2.79052419416 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0238726790451 0.026700313972 89% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.132625994695 0.113004496875 117% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0424403183024 0.0255425247493 166% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0185676392573 0.0127820249294 145% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2136.0 2731.13054187 78% => OK
No of words: 342.0 446.07635468 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.24561403509 6.12365571057 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.57801047555 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.377192982456 0.378187486979 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.312865497076 0.287650121315 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.271929824561 0.208842608468 130% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.16081871345 0.135150697306 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9704551577 2.79052419416 106% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 207.018472906 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488304093567 0.469332199767 104% => OK
Word variations: 50.3557932993 52.1807786196 97% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.2022227129 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8057723904 57.7814097925 59% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.666666667 141.986410481 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.2022227129 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.722222222222 0.724660767414 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 50.2865497076 51.9672348444 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.65263157895 1.8405768891 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359416640776 0.441005458295 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108595608767 0.135418324435 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0749651858191 0.0829849096947 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.584719754199 0.58762219726 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.124788841835 0.147661913831 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162159442372 0.193483328276 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696285815245 0.0970749176394 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.350092813145 0.42659136922 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0827492176477 0.0774707102158 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248348226303 0.312017818177 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462063365459 0.0698173142475 66% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 14.657635468 48% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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