argument 1
While it may seem reasonable, at the first glance, that the "Palean" baskets did not belong to only one particular village, the writer of this argument relies on what might be less reliable or even unsubstantiated premises so as to support his or her claim that I am going to elaborate them upon hereunder.
The first interpretation as to why I believe that the author's argument is not convincing lies in the fact that the writer rests on an hidden assumption that the Brime River never dry up, or not being frozen in any time, and the level of water was same all the time. Therefore, if geographical materials indicate the river was dried up or frozen in a specific time, the argument will be weaken. For instance, it is possible that owning to cold winter in a particular year, the river had been frozen, which gave ancient Palean a chance to walk over ice to reach Lithos.
Secondly, the argument concludes on an unproven correlation that given the depth and water level of the Brime River and the fact that no Palean boat was found in Lithos, Palean baskets had not been made only by ancient Palean. The writer fails to consider the fact that it is possible that residents of Lithos utilized their boats in order to cross the river to reach the Palea, which gave them an opportunity to purchase Palean baskets. Hence, the conclusion would be lack any merit.
However, even if the writer assuming that there was not any way for Palean to reach their baskets to Lithos, thanks to the Brime River condition, the writer fails to consider the fact that it is possible that the Palea and the Brime river came to exist in different time--or, to put it in another way, the author assumes that both the palea and the Brime river came to exist at the same time. There is no document demonstrating the exact date of creating the Brime River as well as the palea; accordingly, we do not know whether the river existed when the Palea came to exist. Unless the river existed before the Palea, Palean could travel to Lithos, and those Palean baskets discovered by archeologist might be brought by Palean before creating the Brime river.
All in all, having considered all the aforementioned ingredients discussed above, the writer's argument cannot be taken into account to be correct on the grounds that it claims on the number of assumptions each of which is dubious. The conclusion will not be cogent other than by removing all the weakness mentioned above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 234, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...liable or even unsubstantiated premises so as to support his or her claim that I am goin...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 138, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...es in the fact that the writer rests on an hidden assumption that the Brime River ...
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Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me river came to exist in different time or, to put it in another way, the author...
^^
Line 6, column 328, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oving all the weakness mentioned above.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 433.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72286374134 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62329228087 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478060046189 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => OK
Sentence length: 36.0 22.8473053892 158% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.090118686 57.8364921388 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.416666667 119.503703932 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.0833333333 23.324526521 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1666666667 5.70786347227 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118213827177 0.218282227539 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055976939071 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684622118636 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867953699469 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487315710666 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.3799401198 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 12.3882235529 234% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.1389221557 147% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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