Essay topics: TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task
(i devoted only miniscule amount of time to comparison of today's parenting with the one of the past)
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Contemporary parents often tend to complain about difficulties which are connected with educating a child in today's realities. They claim that this task has become extremely difficult because of the advent of cell phones, online games and social networks because their offspring usually spend too much time on them. Although I could understand their prospect, I cannot agree with it. The reasons on which my prospect is based will be discussed in details below.
Firstly, to control children's occupation and education is parents' responsibility. Parents must control their children's activity on a daily basis. This is parental basic responsibility because progeny by default might hardly organize and manage themselves. In fact, it is unnatural to devote time to studying or education they ought to have fun and run around. Thus a father or/and a mother should limit time which their child spends on the entertainment online or offline. A modern parent may easily curtail usage of the internet via usage of inbuilt means of Microsoft Windows.
Secondly, children participation to social networks and usage of cell phones may actually be beneficial for them. Social networks have become an inevitable part of our everyday life and educational system has embraced them as well. In fact, many school educators create groups in the Twitter, Facebook which are consisted of students, their parents and teachers. Consequently, youngsters benefit enormously from this innovation. Their assignments are available online, they may clarify understanding of problematic materials or issues with their classmates and even with teachers and smartphones, e-tables have made the social networks available 24/7 for them thus they always can access needed info.
Admittedly, there are some reasons which may allow to someone to state that social networks, cell phones and online games may impede pupils’ education. Chiefly, the one may aver that children spend all their time on playing video games and chatting with their friends about matters which have no connection with their studying. However, I still buttress the idea that those services are beneficial for offspring in case a parent does his job and supervises the activity of the child. In fact, by limiting access to the network, social media a parent gets a perfect tool for steering children's behavior, which if used wisely, greatly alleviates life of parents and which was unthinkable in the past.
To wrap up, the advent and spreading of the social networks, smartphones have mostly beneficial effect on children's education in case parents do their job properly and control children’s usage of the modern conveniences.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Secondly, children participation to social networks and usage of cell phones may actually be beneficial for them.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and participation
flaws:
It is off the topic.
The topic is changed to:
Educating children is a difficult task today because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 421 350
No. of Characters: 2204 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.53 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.235 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.715 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.129 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.291 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... they ought to have fun and run around. Thus a father or/and a mother should limit t...
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Line 7, column 615, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
... for steering childrens behavior, which if used wisely, greatly alleviates life of...
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Line 9, column 227, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pos;s usage of the modern conveniences.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2271.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4200477327 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81337584516 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556085918854 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 693.0 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1261080069 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.55 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.95 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170855213105 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539092838594 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040591301835 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106109260035 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281099257453 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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