Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Dancing plays an important role in a culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Dancing is vary popular art that many people travel around the world to watch it. Every culture and region have its own unique dance. Dancing has important role advertising countries to attract tourists whose are interested in culture. As a part of culture, dancing has important effect on it. Generally, dancing shows our descentdent's beliefs in past centuries and it was considered as society's identity.
First of all, lets to examine ancient perspective toward dance. In the past, dancing demonstrates past people's attitude toward life, circumstances of world and God. Descnedents did dance in rituals to appreciate their God. In fact, they probably danced to prevents the God's anger. Furthermore, dancing was a part of their religion. The function of dance was like pray. For example, in some religions like Hindu, praying is consist of dancing. In addition, past people may believe that dancing gave them a magical power to overcome their enemies. So, as our culture is closely related to our descendent's beliefs and culture is evolution by the times, dancing as part of culture has an prominent effect on culture.
Next, dancing can be regarded as identity of each society. Everyone can detect societies by their specific dancing as they can distinguish countries by observing their flag. For example, even a kid is familiar with Indian dancing and Chinese dancing. For example, when a group of street dancers from Nepal was performed Azeri dancing, my son said me: "oh daddy, look at dancers from Azerbaijan!". In addition, dancing indicate society's perspective about nature and life that is reflected in their identity. Then, dancing is a sign of a society, religion or a particular perspective.
In conclusion, dancing can be consider as part of a culture. The impact of dancing and culture to each other is mutual. Both of them are rooted in past and both of them are a mean to be known by others. It would be a good idea to introduce cultures through their dancing; the strategy that Brazil hold. They introduced their culture by carnivals of Samba dancing in Rio de Janiro.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'varied'.
Suggestion: varied
Dancing is vary popular art that many people travel aro...
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'prevent'.
Suggestion: prevent
...r God. In fact, they probably danced to prevents the Gods anger. Furthermore, dancing wa...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'consisted'.
Suggestion: consisted
...n some religions like Hindu, praying is consist of dancing. In addition, past people ma...
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Line 3, column 682, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...e times, dancing as part of culture has an prominent effect on culture. Next, d...
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Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'told'?
Suggestion: told
...pal was performed Azeri dancing, my son said me: 'oh daddy, look at dancers fro...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eligion or a particular perspective. In conclusion, dancing can be consider a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, look, may, so, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07780979827 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7731999104 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544668587896 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.3081714573 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.48 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.88 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136923834375 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467547094487 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433974859382 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0918918272692 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314621751706 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.59 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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