Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The Internet nowadays is pretty convenient and rich of information, whether valuable or useless. Exposure to all these pieces of information can be very helpful, we can know what happen today or even now with a simple click on our computers, or even find out explanation of top science ideas in some web pages. However, there are a wide range of problems as well. For example, there may be too large amount of junk massage on the Internet, or somebody just can't stop surfing on the Internet. All these are bad. But I don't think they are the problems caused by accessing to much information. The one...
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Sentence: Exposure to all these pieces of information can be very helpful, we can know what happen today or even now with a simple click on our computers, or even find out explanation of top science ideas in some web pages.
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Sentence: I agree with the view that the Internet give us a huge amount of valuable information, though some useless one existing as well.
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Sentence: Our inability to deal with the amount of information make us think accessing such huge one costs a lot of time, causing troubles and is helpless.
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Sentence: And it is our vulnerability to indulge ourselves in these novel piece of information that make us can't stop it.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace make with verb, past tense
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 453 350
No. of Characters: 2006 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.613 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.428 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.454 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.12 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.48 7.5
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.478 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.183 0.07
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