Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
In some modern education methodologies, it is fiercely supported that
children must be encouraged to be competitive individuals rather than cooperative
team players. But is this idea prudent enough to make us build our
education system on that basis?
Many people argue that to be successful in today’s highly competitive world,
individuals should have the skills which can grant competitive advantage to
differentiate themselves from the masses. Admittedly, this idea is mostly true
for the entrepreneurs who must have the determination and skills to pursue
and realise their dreams. Further, in sectors such as advertising and
marketing, the specialists generally need to put the welfare of their company
in front of the masses’ therefore choosing competitiveness and individualism
over the good of all.
On the other hand , co-operative people are required to make any organization to thrive.
Cross-analysing the ideas stated in the previous paragraph, it must be
remembered that only 10% - 20% of the entrepreneurs can pursue their ideas
to success and in many departments of organizations co-operation is paramount.
Also, if very dire situations, such as acts of war, are taken into consideration,
it can easily be understood that, only a handful of leaders are
needed, opposed to a great number of co-operative team-players.
In conclusion, even though our children should have enough sense of
competition to better themselves, they need to be encouraged more to cooperate
to be more beneficial to society and to achieve greater
accomplishments. After all, two hands can always make more noise than one
hand.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 15, column 18, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...er the good of all. On the other hand , co-operative people are required to mak...
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Line 21, column 38, Rule ID: A_GREAT_NUMBER_OF_NN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'co-operatives', 'cooperatives'?
Suggestion: co-operatives; cooperatives
...e needed, opposed to a great number of co-operative team-players. In conclusion, even th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, after all, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63492063492 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.39881230783 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615079365079 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.4198664929 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250492546416 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0930087457268 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074900187552 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0602393140945 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06618151998 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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