TPO45 - integrated writing task
The article states that many people doubt that whether the structure belong to bees or not and provides three reasons of support. However the professor explains it is possible and refutes each of the author’s reasons.
Firstly, the reading claims that there is no bees’ fossil which found 200 million years ago. The professor refutes this poin by saying that bees’ fossil have preserved by sticky liquid of one kind of trees. He states that there is no bees’ fosil from 200 million years ago but it does not mean at that time bees not exist. Maybe, the trees which provide to protect bees' fossil did not exist 200 million years ago.
Second, the article posits that there is a connection between bees and such flower and the flower firs appeared on Earth 125 million years ago. However professor says that bees existed before flower apperaed. According to the professor early bees did not depend on flower and when flower found out bees adapted the flower. After that, bees depended on flower.
Third, the reading says that the fossilized structure similar to modern nest chambers and the nest lack some of the details of modern bees’ nests and the fossilized strutures were made by other insect. The professor opposes this point by explaining that the chamber were built by bees. He also states that both nest samples were examined with chemical method and both modern and fossilized structure were made by similar wood material. The evidence show that the fossilized structure belong to bees.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... and provides three reasons of support. However the professor explains it is possible a...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 145, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ppeared on Earth 125 million years ago. However professor says that bees existed before...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... modern nest chambers and the nest lack some of the details of modern bees' nests and ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 455, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'shows'.
Suggestion: shows
... by similar wood material. The evidence show that the fossilized structure belong to...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, may, second, so, third, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1275.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 254.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01968503937 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28553056145 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503937007874 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 375.3 419.366225166 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1315088516 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0714285714 110.228320801 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78571428571 7.06452816374 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.041058955458 0.272083759551 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0171740565932 0.0996497079465 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0167050348987 0.0662205650399 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0244015999587 0.162205337803 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116183905302 0.0443174109184 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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