Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand. Give reason for your position.
If I make a lot of money it would be possible for me to provide better living standards for my family and many facilities. In addition, I can afford to send my children to better schools where they can catch up with many opportunities and opt for many activities which are costly. Furthermore, when I go out on tours and fun with my family I can enjoy to the fullest by staying in five star hotels and eating in five star restaurants and also enjoying the expensive rides.
On the hand if I live a comfortable life, I would be able to spend time with my family and discussing various things which important for the future. I would live my life peacefully without the pressure or stress of the workload. In addition, I would take out time for things like exercise, playing, practising my hobby because that would help me to remain fit and healthy. I would spend more time with my children and involve with them by helping them doing their homework and nurturing them.
Although, making lot of money has a lot of advantages, but I would like to live a comfortable life rather living a stressful life because life is not only about earning lot money it’s all about earning that much that is needed to live a happy and contempt life and I would like to spend time with my family rather spending money on them.
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Sentence: On the hand if I live a comfortable life, I would be able to spend time with my family and discussing various things which important for the future.
Description: The fragment which important for is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace important with adverb
Sentence: In addition, I would take out time for things like exercise, playing, practising my hobby because that would help me to remain fit and healthy.
Error: practising Suggestion: practicing
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