Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind such as reading and doing puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views.
In today modern world, people are busy engaging themselves in work and study so leisure time has a great impact on our personal life. Some people believe that leisure time is time for self-development so it would be used intelligently while others argue that they should take their mind a rest. The idea has always been a matter of debate for best usage of leisure time.
There are several reasons why people chose to do some productive activities in their spare time. For one, devoting in intellectual activities like reading or completing puzzles help to enhance one’s knowledge and may be create a more interesting personality. It can also be argued that the more people engage in mind-active activities during spare time, the less likely they were to be depressed. Therefore, participating in those activities not only reduces stress but also improves mental health.
However, there are also strong reasons why people feel like resting during their free time. Firstly, coming home after a hard day at work, people involving in intellectual jobs tend to unwind rather than participate in mind-challenging hobbies. Another point could add is that doing mindless activities like watching TV or taking rest can help brain to refresh itself in order to be able to function more effectively.
In conclusion, leisure time is supposed to be a break from our busy life to balance between working and living. Therefore, I think that the best use of one’s spare time depend on individual’s feeling of satisfaction. It would be better to utilize this time to both satisfy personal fulfillment and self-improvement.
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