The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.
Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.
It is true that, most of the children in western countries such as the UK, USA and other European countries are suffering from child obesity, and in the last decade the obesity growth is almost 20% more.
There are possible reasons, why there is an increase in child obesity. Firstly, most of the children are given higher amount as a pocket money by their parents while going to school, this led them to buy more unhealthy food, such as deep fried potato chips or sandwich with lots of extra cheese. Secondly, most of the western countries have a huge production of cheese, for example, country li...
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Sentence: Finally, those who prefer playing computer games will also have negatives effects, outdoor games requires lots of physical movement and computer games doesn't. Therefore overall growth of the child is very slow, due to less physical movement, their reflexes are slow, and lack of stamina and other health related areas.
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Secondly, most of the western countries have a huge production of cheese, for example, country like Switzerland has a huge production of Cheese.
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