Luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position
Because of globalization,technology,developed economy and society resources for earning money has been increased been increased making many of them to live a sumptuous life provided with all luxuries and comforts.Most of the people are accustomed to this life.Whether this lavish and convenient life is preventing people from developing into a strong and independent persons is debated many.Some argue that sumptuous living provides access to many resources enabling them to grow into strong and independent personalities. However this lavish life actually hampers many of them to develop into strong and independents persons as they aren’t barely have any difficulties in life,and challenges in life.I too believe that luxurious life hinders people to develop strong and independent attitude for many reasons.
Luxurious life prevents from facing many difficulties in life which is actually necessary to develop strong minds.Difficulties include financial problems.As the people who lead luxurious life have plenty of money they can solve problems related to money like money necessary for education,leading a pleasant life. In addition most of them don’t have health problems.As people have money they have access to good treatment and can easily reduce the health problems if they are any.Furthermore they don’t have strong minds to adapt to the situation if their desire isn’t fulfilled. Luxurious living provides all comforts like car,good home,and all things needed for joyful life etc.They feel extremely disappointed even their small wish isn’t fulfilled.
The people who are accustomed to lavish life are hardly find their own way and are dependent on money.They are dependent on money for their education.They pay off tuition fees and college fees with the money they possess instead of working hard to get scholarship or by taking up part time job.In addition they also don’t find their own way to earn.Most them would take up business started up their parents or don’t work as they don’t take pain of working and facing problems.In fact, we can rarely see children of successors becoming successors.Furthermore they are also dependent on others to solve their problems.For instance if they are psychological problems mostly they will take help of a good doctor or parents to solve,but rarely try to find a way out of themselves.
In conclusion luxurious life can hinder people to develop strong minds and live independently.They don’t face many challenges in life and work on their own.People can develop strong mind if they lead normal life with minimal comforts as it enables people to understand world and confidence to live independently.Thus, the present life of sumptuous living isn’t good in developing strong and independent attitude.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2383.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 427.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58079625293 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.45974014078 2.79657885939 124% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456674473068 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 739.8 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.2370786517 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 61.0 23.0359550562 265% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 189.462935905 60.3974514979 314% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 340.428571429 118.986275619 286% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 61.0 23.4991977007 260% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.1428571429 5.21951772744 290% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 38.0 7.80617977528 487% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194928694227 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125201630152 0.0831039109588 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804962178164 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144151736859 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792788089417 0.0667264976115 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.4 14.1392134831 250% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 1.1 48.8420337079 2% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.3 12.1743820225 232% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.97 12.1639044944 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.38706741573 122% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.0 11.8971910112 261% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.4 11.2143820225 235% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.7820224719 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.