Governments should change the way individuals live while others believe they should choose the way themselves. Discuss these both points of view and give your opinion.
Every nations have their own ideology that prejudice people’s live. Ideologies influence someone’s live as well as establish how is a person shows their attitudes to the society. In other words, the government rules the way individuals live which written in regulations and laws. However, some people believe that they should determine their ways of live by themselves and break their ideologies.
In one side, an ideology such Communism, for example, makes citizens are not allowed to do whatever what they want to do. Because of this idelogy has several rules which make a person’s rights become limited which all of their activities are being watched by invisible eyes that controlled their movements. An idelogies has reasons why they make several rules that handled everyone’s live. According to Karl Marx, a scientist who lived in 18th century, Communism has functions to decrease poverty and borjuism to become equal each other.
In the other side, some people disagree with this statement because ideologies can not represent a person’s human rights. According to University of Michigan’s research which asking to hundreds of foreigns who choose to live in another country, Paul Breed, a psychologist explained the most reason that makes citizens want to move and live in another country is rejecting the ideology of their own country.
In summary, the government has several methods to control their country by ideology that they believed, but a person has rights to choose the way of live that they want to do.
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Sentence: In one side, an ideology such Communism, for example, makes citizens are not allowed to do whatever what they want to do.
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Sentence: According to University of Michigan's research which asking to hundreds of foreigns who choose to live in another country, Paul Breed, a psychologist explained the most reason that makes citizens want to move and live in another country is rejecting the ideology of their own country.
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Sentence: Because of this idelogy has several rules which make a person's rights become limited which all of their activities are being watched by invisible eyes that controlled their movements.
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Sentence: An idelogies has reasons why they make several rules that handled everyone's live.
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Category: Satisfactory Excellent
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