Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Today in the competitive world, money plays very important role in the development of the children. But in the meantime whether it is blessing or curse has sparked a heated debate. Some people believe that children brought up by poor parents are better prepared to face the problem. However, other argues that rich parents brought their children better and they can live successful life. This essay will discuss both aspects before making any definitive conclusion.
On one hand side, some people believe that some children from the less wealthy families might be in the good position. Children fro...
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Sentence: As a result, poor children are becoming more hard work and have more patience.
Description: The fragment becoming more hard is rare
Sentence: For instance, poorer children may have to wait until the birthday for favorite toy or game that they have asked for, and this encourage them to learn the patience.
Description: The fragment this encourage them is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace encourage with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
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More compound or complex sentences wanted.
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Score: 6.0 out of 9
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No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
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No. of Different Words: 160 200
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