do you agree or disagree with the following statement ?
Younger( aged 5 to 10) school children should be required to study art and music in addition to math ,language ,science and history
Art and music are very different subjects than math, science and any language. To study that subject students must have basic knowledge of language. So that they can easily understand the art and music subjects without any difficulties. I disagree on this statement that" Younger( aged 5 to 10) school children should be required to study art and music in addition to math , language , science and history". There are so many reasons which prove that art and music study is not so much require than language , math and science study.
First of all young age students must concentrate on radical subjects which give them basic knowledge of language, math and science. These basic things are very useful in daily life .For example, If I have to purchase the milk of $4.75 and I have $ 10 Bill. In return I know that I must have $ 5.25. I can do this calculation because I know the math. I can read the newspaper every day because I know the language. This how the basic subjects help to understand daily activities .But art and music subjects are not basic not that useful in the daily routine life. So it depends up the younger students to take this subject or not. They have right to select these subjects. These subjects are not much useful in perceptive of core education. Because of this current education system not contain these subjects as compulsory subjects.
Secondly, every young student has different brain capacity to understand all these things .Learning music or art is not so simple thing. Some students have huge potential to learn music and art with all basic subjects while others are unable to do that all things together. So before make art and music compulsory we must understand the mental and physical capacity of younger student because everybody has different capacity of brain and understanding.
Moreover, it may possible that they lose their concentration from study and give more time to learn art and music which will directly effect on their basic knowledge. It may happen that they will weak in math and other subject. So that’s why they are unable to do calculation, unable to read newspaper, unable to understand science.
One more thing is that now in 21st century learning art and music does not have so much value as compare to study of math and science. Because the whole job systems depend up on science, math and language.
However, some students want to do their carrier in art or music for that students you can keep these subjects as optional or extra activity or you can keep two or three lectures in week to introduce about art and music instead of make it compulsory .Finally before make
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But art and music subjects are not basic not that useful in the daily routine life.
But art and music subjects are not basic and not that useful in the daily routine life.
Sentence: Moreover, it may possible that they lose their concentration from study and give more time to learn art and music which will directly effect on their basic knowledge.
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Sentence: One more thing is that now in 21st century learning art and music does not have so much value as compare to study of math and science.
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Sentence: However, some students want to do their carrier in art or music for that students you can keep these subjects as optional or extra activity or you can keep two or three lectures in week to introduce about art and music instead of make it compulsory .Finally before make
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