Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don’t.
Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience
Nowadays, several sport games have become worldwide popularity thank to the huge development of mass media which has an international coverage. As a result, a successful athlete now has an enormous number of fan all around the world, who take him as their role model, especially teenager. This essay will demonstrate the reason why professional athletes would be a good models.
Firstly, most of successful sportsmen have variety of valuable qualities which are great source of inspiration for people, including perseverance, patience, extraordinary passion. In order to perform an extremely complicated maneuver on the court, necessitating high level of coordination and reaction time, an athlete must practices laboriously with 200 percent of their mental and physical strength. Moreover, some sophisticated skills, which can take year to acquire and contain extensive risk of injury , are the most obvious proofs for their patience and huge passion. For instance, Cristiano Ronaldo, who always challenges himself the strictest and most intensive exercises in order to improve his small physical condition for adapting harsh football environment, is a bright inspired model for teenagers.
Secondly, using professional athlete as a model have a tremendous effect on encouraging sporty spirit inside the kids. Along with the significant development of technology, smartphone and computer are overshadowing all the time of people, which lead to sedentary lifestyle in young people. If having a sportsman as an idol, the children will tend to fascinate playing sports as well as their idols. Because of the popularity of sport game, sport love can be multiplied and blossomed in a entire generation.
From all mentions discussed above, I totally support the idea that young people should consider professional athletes as their role models.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1570.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60714285714 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0358813006 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9513620065 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.833333333 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91666666667 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170897075492 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611720403537 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519409564902 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113617244046 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405476245731 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.13 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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