Some People believe that advertisement about marketing have significant impact on success of the business managers, while others think paying attention to workers' condition have this effect. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
We live in a competitive business world in which there are determinant factors that have profound impacts on the success or failure of a company such as advertising or consideration about workers' circumstances. I believe the latter factor is much more important in the success of a business because of its impact on workers' efficiency and the quality of the products.
One of the most important aspects of paying attention to workers' condition is its effect on their efficiency. When workers know that they are considered as valuable members of their job environment and their managers try to do their best to remove all the obstacles to make a safe and decent work place without any anxiety or stress for them, they persevere to utilize all of their talent in order to enhance their results. To prove this claim, I can refer to an article having been published in Times magazine, which reveals that in Google Company the workers' efficiency increased up to 40% by just taking consideration to their working ambience.
The second significant impact of improving the working environment for employees is the more qualitative products they would produce. It is obvious that workers try to spare nothing to enhance the quality of the products and produce goods with no defect when they are satisfied with their job. Besides, the more qualitative the products are, the better they are known among people and they act themselves as propaganda for company. It is proved as a result of the research has done in the Oxford University, in which the company owners improve the work condition almost 30% and consequently the quality of the manufactured goods raise up to 60%.
In conclusion, although advertisement is of high necessity in modern life, enhancing the work condition can boost the quality of the products and motivate employees to work better. In addition it tempts workers to acquire the latest knowledge and technology and use it in their work.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 317, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
... of a business because of its impact on workers efficiency and the quality of the produ...
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Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
...hich reveals that in Google Company the workers efficiency increased up to 40% by just ...
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Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...d motivate employees to work better. In addition it tempts workers to acquire the latest...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, if, second, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1640.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03067484663 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80320437345 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527607361963 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.4208159438 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.090909091 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6363636364 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.54545454545 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161647147127 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697386144104 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594685722852 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103528882859 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701119891129 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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