At university or colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and should receive equal financial support.
Having proper activities for leisure times have an important role in happiness of life. If people spend their free times in activities that bring energy and charge them foe life they will be successful in life. A lot of people have the opportunity to go to university or colleges and period of attending in these academic places could be good memory for them if they spend their free times in other activities such as sport or social activities. So I believe that university or colleges should support sports and social activities for two important reasons.
The main reason is that students need to recover their energy and have relax time during their studies. If students attend in a condition that they have fun and also can do social activities the study would be bearable. For example I remember that during my university studies I was a member of mountain climbing group and every week we had a trip to a mountain near the university because of existence of various beautiful mountains surrounding the university. This weekly program was my motivation to spend the hard works studying and doing projects. Because thinking about weekend which I have plan to go to nature gave me energy to do my duties. As you can see side activities in university have positive effects on student efficiencies.
The second reason is that even though university or colleges are places for study and research, they are also small societies which need sports and social activities. Without these activities university will fail to introduce graduated people which are able to create a developed society. For instance, I read in paper about the effects of universities on culture of cities. Based on this article the cities that have big university also have energetic and active environment if the students of the university be active. Introducing active and energetic students to society need universities spend money on activities that make students happy and gives them energy.
In conclusion I believe that sports and social activities should receive financial supports from university because it gives energy to students and make them active in society. Finally I think attending of students in sports and social activities should have be mandatory for them because a lot of students don't know the effects of them on their life.
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- TPO 45 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 72, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'relaxed'.
Suggestion: relaxed
...s need to recover their energy and have relax time during their studies. If students ...
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Line 2, column 553, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hard works studying and doing projects. Because thinking about weekend which I have pla...
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Line 2, column 597, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'planned'.
Suggestion: planned
...use thinking about weekend which I have plan to go to nature gave me energy to do my...
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Line 2, column 650, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... nature gave me energy to do my duties. As you can see side activities in universi...
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Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'activities'' or 'activity's'?
Suggestion: activities'; activity's
...ts and social activities. Without these activities university will fail to introduce gradu...
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Line 4, column 177, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...udents and make them active in society. Finally I think attending of students in sports...
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Line 4, column 259, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...ports and social activities should have be mandatory for them because a lot of stu...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...tory for them because a lot of students dont know the effects of them on their life....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, second, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04155844156 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69768239456 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457142857143 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2974830526 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.176470588 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6470588235 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246062143206 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999489583407 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101850394285 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180285414179 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758737145803 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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