Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of the time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing thing together that are related to the school work.
Some people think that it is better for parents to spent their free time helping their children in school work. People think that one of the parent's responsibilities is to help their children to study more. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that it is best for parents and children spend time together. The basics of my opinion is social and educational.
From the social perspective, parent and children need to understand each others better. If parent will spend more time with their children playing sport or even encouraging them to play a sport, that would create a better relationship between them. For example, some parents preferred to participate for their children in a sport such as soccer, swimming or basket and encourage them to succed. They go with them to the training. parents encourage them as well. Parents stand beside them until they successes and become expertise. That’s how parents could create a better friendship relation between their children. Although some parents are too busy with their work, they believe that encourage their children is the best way to increase their social life.
Educationally, the school educational system is the best method for learning. If parent incorporate themselves in their children education, that would harm the children more than benefit the them. For example, . Schools have many teachers and they are trained better to educate the children. They know how to deliver the information to children easily. Teachers understand the phycology of each child. They know that each child need a different way to be educated. On the other hand, Parents are not expertise in teaching and leaning.Parents want their children to succeed. They try to force them to understand the subject, even if that is hard. That may create problems and eventually children may hat education.
In conclusion for the reasons I mentioned above , I believe that busy parents should better enjoy their free time with their children. They could share interest with each other. They could encourage them to be more proficient. That create a better relationships between them. Also, parent should not involve in their children education. Schools are the best to teach them. School system are created to learn children in a proper ways.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13730569948 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71881075599 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432642487047 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5713651708 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.8214285714 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7857142857 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.82142857143 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268818845513 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815198451501 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862684402291 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203262269442 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681553956273 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.94 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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