23.10.2017 science could help people live up to 100 or 200 years even. would that be a good or bad development ? Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many believe a life-span of an average human being will keep increasing and it may become as big as two hundred years. Below advantageous and disadvantageous ramifications of the trend will be discussed and author’s opinion will be given.
On the one hand, the change in discussion has some negative facets, for instance, it will probably lead to the increase in the number of elderly and senior citizens that depend on the state’s support. Consequently, the percentage of a budget that will be devoted to this part of a population will steadily grow from year to year. It means finances that otherwise could have been spent on infrastructure and science are being poured into the health-care system. Furthermore, the youth who do not have needed qualifications and experience will likely face severe problems with employment because the majority of well-paid positions will be inevitably occupied by older employees. In other words, the trend may subside the economic development and cause unrest among the unemployed young people.
On the other hand, the longevity may bring many beneficial changes as well. Firstly, a more peaceful world may be expected when countries will be ruled by wiser rulers and politicians who have more life experience. Those individuals will probably avoid using brute force to steer a political process and instead will use the art of diplomacy and negotiation. Secondly, many problems that are ignored today will be addressed. To illustrate, many contemporary dwellers do not perceive the modern environmental problems as serious ones because it requires the ability to foresee the consequences of today’s decisions and folks whose life may be as long as 200 years will unavoidably get this novel point of view on the planet and become more responsible and reasonable in their actions.
In my opinion, although increasing a lifespan of human beings is an ancient dream, its achieving will bring more adverse aftermaths than positive ones because the natural process of replacing old people by new ones will be violated.
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Essay evaluation report
senior citizens that depend on the state’s support.
senior citizens who depend on the state’s support.
It means finances that otherwise could have been spent on infrastructure and science are being poured into the health-care system.
It means that finances that otherwise could have been spent on infrastructure and science are being poured into the health-care system.
the youth who do not have needed qualifications
the youths who do not have needed qualifications
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flaws:
1. 'will' is over used.
2. some sentences are too long, like:
To illustrate, many contemporary dwellers do not perceive the modern environmental problems as serious ones because it requires the ability to foresee the consequences of today’s decisions and folks whose life may be as long as 200 years will unavoidably get this novel point of view on the planet and become more responsible and reasonable in their actions.
3. No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 331 350
No. of Characters: 1693 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.265 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.115 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.843 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.462 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.15 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.536 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.029 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 84, Rule ID: IT_IS[7]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...an of human beings is an ancient dream, its achieving will bring more adverse after...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 7.85571142285 267% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27190332326 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97909094964 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607250755287 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.2648763255 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.230769231 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9230769231 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114356174598 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459976178372 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331168903098 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0793011042631 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120412828864 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.98 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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