In the Carlton County the incidences of vandalism has been increasing over the past two years and at the same time there has also been dramatic increase in out-of-state migrants. So we should ban all the immigrants moving in the city in order to stop vandalism.
In the Carlton County the incidences of vandalism has been increasing over the past two years and at the same time there has also been dramatic increase in out-of-state migrants and thus based on two parallel event the author has made a conclusion that in order to control the destruction of public property and to restore peace in Carlton County we must take harsh measure to restrict the number of out-of-state migrants. The author has based this reckless conculsion on various assumption that need to be dealt in order to fairly come on a conculsion which will help prevent vandalism in town.
Firstly, it is clearly mention that many citizen believe that migrants are resposible for the increase in vadalism. There is no clear evidence that such actions are taken by migrants. There can be several reasons why citizen might feel that migrants are responsible for vandalism. For starting they have general disliking towards them as they have created unwanted competitions for them in the existing job markets. Also the out-of-state migrants are using there resources and taking there place in their own homeland. Thus it is quite clear that just on the bases of belief of sevearal people we can come to conclusion that immigrants are responsible for destruction of publuc property and actions must be taken against them.
Futhermore, we cannot restrict the nnumber of out-of-state migrants until and unless we have a clear staticstical study of the effect this restriction will cause to the growth and development of Carlton County. The immigrants might be responsible for doing menial jobs and creating ease in life of people. If we restrict them there is high chances that there will be no one to take up such jobs. In another possiblity that those immigrants are responsible for creating trade and business market and creating profit to the local people and earning of various people depend on these immigrants. Thus if there is an restriction on the number of migirants there can be observed faculations in economic conditions of the state.
In the argument it is only vaguly mentioned that there is an increase in vandalism in the city and also vague terms like dramatic is used but there is no clear stats to show us the exact number on which we base our concusion upon. Hence instead of assuming or generalising that a particular community is responsible for creating vandalism in the state, we should take strict actions and take preventive measures aganist people found commiting crime. If there are strict rules like heavy fines on people caught creating havoc or a more severe punishment if found more than once or if there are intsalled cameras on the street to detect and find guilty people there is a higher chances that this destrcution of public property can be controlled.
Hence the conculsion author has provided us is full of loopholes and thus we need to take care of various other issues and then find a suitable solution to the problem and find a way which will be more effective in elimniating the problem of damange of public property and punish the sinner.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: events
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Suggestion: mentioned
...lism in town. Firstly, it is clearly mention that many citizen believe that migrants...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun citizen seems to be countable; consider using: 'many citizens'.
Suggestion: many citizens
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...s for them in the existing job markets. Also the out-of-state migrants are using the...
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Suggestion: Thus,
...king there place in their own homeland. Thus it is quite clear that just on the base...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...bs and creating ease in life of people. If we restrict them there is high chances ...
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Suggestion: Thus,
...ious people depend on these immigrants. Thus if there is an restriction on the numbe...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...f public property can be controlled. Hence the conculsion author has provided us i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2576.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 522.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93486590038 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6656645847 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454022988506 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 809.1 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.7723491883 60.3974514979 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.529411765 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7058823529 23.4991977007 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.05882352941 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233285015353 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687054137553 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118584789358 0.0758088955206 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137465988339 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149575404372 0.0667264976115 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.0 11.8971910112 219% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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