Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Q: Parents today are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents contribute not only to upbringing of children, but also to guide them whenever needed. It is unquestionably true that parents want their children to have bright future in this competitive era, so from the very beginning they foster value of good quality education. I want to explore my view in following ways:
Firstly, most of parents these days know that highly renowned company may seldom hire uneducated person. In fact level of education among elderly is also plummeting and their horizon have expanded to decide which option is logical for their children. To provide stable career in future and open up options, parents from the very early age guide their children to focus on study. For instance, my mother always taught importance of education to attain decent job in future and to amend skills and shape personality. Motivation and camaraderie at home compelled me to achieve successful career.
Secondly, Parents involve in mending child's performance in school. Parents make effort to investigate child's progress by checking homework and regularly attending meeting with professor. For instance, when when I was in my 12th grade I was weak in physics, my mother often checked my result and guided me to attend extra class. Also, she paid for my tuition expense and she used to ask me random questions to scrutinise my performance. Thus, I ended up passing with flying colors.
On the other hand, it was very easy to acquire job in the past due to least competition and lower literacy rate. In ancient times parents were also not educated with specialised degree, without having clear idea of future prospects of attaining education, how can parents encourage their children to go to school . In addition, cost of living was very low in past as compared to today, so earning outrageous was not their desire.
In conclusion, it is worth saying that there are concrete benefits of education these days, so wise parents participate in educating their children to shape their personality and to have financial security.
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- Integrated Essay 1 on Chevalier 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 96, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...but also to guide them whenever needed. It is unquestionably true that parents w...
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Line 3, column 10, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the parents') or simply say ''most parents''.
Suggestion: most of the parents; most parents
... my view in following ways: Firstly, most of parents these days know that highly renowned co...
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Line 5, column 110, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (childs) must be used with a third-person verb: 'progresses'.
Suggestion: progresses
...rents make effort to investigate childs progress by checking homework and regularly atte...
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Line 5, column 202, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: when
...g meeting with professor. For instance, when when I was in my 12th grade I was weak in ph...
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Line 7, column 68, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the least'.
Suggestion: to the least
...ery easy to acquire job in the past due to least competition and lower literacy rate. In...
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Line 7, column 313, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...encourage their children to go to school . In addition, cost of living was very lo...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ng outrageous was not their desire. In conclusion, it is worth saying that the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1709.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10149253731 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68178213657 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617910447761 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6176569751 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.8125 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9375 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23047774933 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755242434376 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542263404719 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135212221241 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333236502968 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.