101.There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual workers than do businesses in the nearby large city of Masonton. Furthermore, Leeville has only one physician for its one thousand residents, but in Masonton the proportion of physicians to residents is five times as high. Finally, the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Masonton residents. These findings suggest that people seeking longer and healthier lives should consider moving to small communities.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In this argument, the author points out that people who want to live longer and healthier lives should think about immigrating to a small city. To support this conclusion, they use a series of evidence to prove that people living in the small city would live longer, for instance, in Leeville there are fewer sick people than the nearby large city. Moreover, people unlikely to find many physicians in Leeville. Lastly, we are informed that the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Mansonton residents. While it is convincing to claim that we should live in a smaller city if we seek longer and healthier lives at first glance, close scrutiny reveals that the conclusion lacks critical support, there are a number of unsubstantiated assumptions, which if proven unwarranted, will seriously challenge the author’s conclusion.
First of all, we need to consider the reason why residents in Leevile get fewer sick than residents in Masonton. the author's unsubstantiated assumption is that residents in Leeville get healthier because of the small city where they live. If new evidence or study shows that residents in Leeville get fewer sick stem from good exercise ritual or balanced diet, then the conclusion in argument will be weakened. However, if new evidence discloses an opposite situation, therefore the conclusion is lent support to.
In addition, the author asserts that the proportion of physicians to residents in Mansonton is as five times as residents in Leeville. The author would like to claim that residents in Leeville live healthier and do not need more physicians. The assumption is potentially problematic because we are not informed about the level of health state. Nor do we know whether the number of the physician can account for healthy state of the residents in Leeville. If it turns out that the number of physicians have insufficient correlate with healthy state of residents in Leevile. Then the author’s recommendation is unconvincing.
Moreover, the author points out that the average age of Leeville people is higher than Masonton people. we have no idea why the average age of Leeville people could more than that of Masonton people, even more we do not know the time period. if we find that the data is fake, then the conclusion is in great doubt because the validity of study is unfounded. if we find that the time period just one year and we calculate the average of age, so we are unconvinced of the conclusion because it is likely that amount of older people just moving to Leevile and living here last year.
Granted that there are fewer sick days, physician and get higher average age in small city Leeville, we also need to consider other factors could account for this phenomenon presented in the argument. For example, a regular exercise habit, relaxing working environment also lead live longer than other, if it turns out that residents of Leeville is thus equipped, then we are inclined to believe that argument behind the better health and greater longevity lie factors other than the size of city.
To sum up, while the conclusion of author is convincing at first glance, there are a large number of unsubstantiated assumptions which is proven unwarranted, just become wishful thinking, we could decide validity of the conclusion whether convincing or not until we examine it carefully.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Lastly, we are informed that the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Mansonton residents.
Description: The fragment informed that the is not usually preceded by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is
Sentence: While it is convincing to claim that we should live in a smaller city if we seek longer and healthier lives at first glance, close scrutiny reveals that the conclusion lacks critical support, there are a number of unsubstantiated assumptions, which if proven unwarranted, will seriously challenge the author's conclusion.
Description: The fragment a number of is not usually preceded by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is
Sentence: First of all, we need to consider the reason why residents in Leevile get fewer sick than residents in Masonton. the author's unsubstantiated assumption is that residents in Leeville get healthier because of the small city where they live.
Description: The fragment Leevile get fewer is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace get with verb, past tense
Description: The tag a noun, singular, proper is not usually followed by the
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Description: The fragment Leeville get healthier is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace get with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Sentence: If new evidence or study shows that residents in Leeville get fewer sick stem from good exercise ritual or balanced diet, then the conclusion in argument will be weakened.
Description: The fragment Leeville get fewer is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace get with verb, past tense
Sentence: However, if new evidence discloses an opposite situation, therefore the conclusion is lent support to.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a sentence terminator
Suggestion: Refer to to and .
Sentence: In addition, the author asserts that the proportion of physicians to residents in Mansonton is as five times as residents in Leeville.
Description: The fragment residents in Mansonton is not usually followed by is
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace is with are
Sentence: The author would like to claim that residents in Leeville live healthier and do not need more physicians.
Description: The fragment Leeville live healthier is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace live with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Sentence: Moreover, the author points out that the average age of Leeville people is higher than Masonton people. we have no idea why the average age of Leeville people could more than that of Masonton people, even more we do not know the time period. if we find that the data is fake, then the conclusion is in great doubt because the validity of study is unfounded. if we find that the time period just one year and we calculate the average of age, so we are unconvinced of the conclusion because it is
Description: A verb, present tense, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by an End of sentence
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Sentence: For example, a regular exercise habit, relaxing working environment also lead live longer than other, if it turns out that residents of Leeville is thus equipped, then we are inclined to believe that argument behind the better health and ----------------
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- wrong here: 'if we find that the data is fake...', In GRE, we always consider the data are true.
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flaws:
the fifth paragraph is extra or duplicated. can be removed.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 558 350
No. of Characters: 2754 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.86 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.935 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.693 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 200 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 149 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 114 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.368 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.618 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.598 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.222 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: scrutiny
...er and healthier lives at first glance, close scrutiny reveals that the conclusion lacks criti...
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Line 1, column 787, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...r of unsubstantiated assumptions, which if proven unwarranted, will seriously chal...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...hallenge the author's conclusion. First of all, we need to consider the re...
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Line 2, column 116, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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... fewer sick than residents in Masonton. the authors unsubstantiated assumption is t...
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...ore the conclusion is lent support to. In addition, the author asserts that the...
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Line 3, column 457, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...thy state of the residents in Leeville. If it turns out that the number of physici...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, lastly, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2826.0 2260.96107784 125% => OK
No of words: 558.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06451612903 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80647221185 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.405017921147 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 900.0 705.55239521 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.2308054517 57.8364921388 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.454545455 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3636363636 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.40909090909 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0941830844318 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339459696034 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363944065529 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0568068759619 0.128457276422 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456923290036 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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