smoking campaign
The passage and lecture was both about how effective the public campaign to stop smoking affected people, particularly teens to quit or prevent from smoking. The writer considers the good consequences of anti-smoking set of tactics consisting of several workshops, non-smoking club establishment and advertisement, whereas the speaker lists facts about how easily the results are fading.
Firstly, as the writer illustrates, almost half of the teens who used to smoke has seen the anti-smoking promotion which caused them to not smoke in further. Moreover, by survey suggests, those 50% of teens are less likely to smoke than the other half who didn`t see any kind of projects. However, the narrator casts doubt on this point by mentioning several reasons. She suggests the audience to see how people`s perspective have changed in a few months later from the campaigns ending. More than half, 58% of the teens answered they are more likely to smoke for the next year indicates how useless all the projects were.
Moreover, the writer mentions the success of this maneuver strongly that it reached fairly 50% of the individual ear. Furthermore, course of actions as same as this are going to be introduced to public in order to let them understand negative impact of smoking. Even though, the speaker shows refuse on this point. She tells that only after 3 months from the day when the campaign ended, the number of people who are aware of the project was decreased by 20%. Also, she recommends if the public health department really want to achieve a goal by organizing this kind of actions, it may help to see the truth of consequences whether it is working or not.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, whereas, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 281.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98220640569 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72889467998 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608540925267 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 419.366225166 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4811914059 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.666666667 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 21.698381199 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 7.06452816374 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294994249222 0.272083759551 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893450756924 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931411636871 0.0662205650399 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204397240822 0.162205337803 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113888441257 0.0443174109184 257% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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