The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Khanh Ha on Mon, 07/30/2018 - 00:57

The line graph indicates how many people aged 65 and over in three different nations namely USA, Sweden and Japan during 6 decades from 1940 to 2000 and give predictions for 2020 and 2040.

Overall, the proportion of elderly people in USA and Sweden increased rapidly between 1940 and 2000, whilst, that in Japan just fluctuated slightly over the same period. However, it is estimated that Japan will experience the fastest growth in the numbers of old people and surpass the statistics of USA and Sweden by 2040.

In 1940, 5% of the population in Japan was more than 65 years old. Higher than that was the proportions in Sweden and USA –with 7% and 10% of people were more than 65 years old respectively. Those 2 figures both grew up to 15% in the next 60 years. Following the reverse pattern, Japan witnessed a slight decrease and then recovered to more than 6% by 2000.

By 2040, a dramatic growth to more than 27% is predicted for Japan. Meanwhile, the figures of USA and Sweden might be a little bit lower at under 25%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 855.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 185.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62162162162 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40946514377 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594594594595 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 243.9 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7783171489 43.030603864 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5555555556 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.23603664747 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136158205437 0.215688989381 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586991969401 0.103423049105 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626279657086 0.0843802449381 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0916625003323 0.15604864568 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062600374652 0.0819641961636 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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