Some people think that people should save up for their life after retirement. To what extent do you agree or disagree and why?
The topic is about the necessary of human after the retirement of jobs. Many people say that they must keep and save their good thing for their future lives after their retirements. As a writer, I definitely support people who agree about that issue, and I bring some of my reasons to back my decision.
In the main reason, people need to know that they will not have much energy like a teenager when they are getting old, and they probably will ask the other human hands to do their activities. So, people absolutely must try to get much good friend as soon as possible and make the best relationship with them. Then, the people will have a lot of friends when they are old already, so they will be easy to do everything that they want because they have their friends to be asked a help in their grandparent time. For example, when a father of mine was young, he always tried to give a hand for all people who he knew and always tried to make a perfect relationship, so today, in his old time, he has much friend who always wants to help him to finish his jobs whenever he needs them, and this condition can make him to enjoy his special times with his big family.
In the second reason, people always save much money since they got a first salary from their companies and factories. They believe that money can build their old time to become happier than when they were young, so they collect the money as much as they are able. For illustration, most of Indonesians believe that their teen times are the time for them to collect much money from their jobs or their businesses. Then, they will be happy, and they will not have problems in their old time.
On the other hand, some people claim that they do not need to keep anything for their future life because when they do that, they will waste their time and money. Also, they believe that they must feel happy as long as they want, so they will always think about happiness whenever they are.
In the synopsis, some people support that they must save something good for their lives after the retirements, but the others think that they only need happiness in this life.
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Sentence: As a writer, I definitely support people who agree about that issue, and I bring some of my reasons to back my decision.
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