The bar chart below show the percentage of Australian men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010
How many Australian people (in percentages), male and female, did a common physical activity split by age group during 2010 is illustrated by the diagram. It is immediately apparent that Australian women showed their relative superiority over Australian men in the percentage of those who carried on physical activity in 2010. In addition, not only did the figure for Australian men witness a descending trend but that for Australian women experienced the same pattern as well.
Regarding Australian men committed physical activity in 2010, it is clearly seen that there was a decline between 15 to 24 group and over 65 group. This was started at 52.8 -the greatest proportion of Australian men figure-, witnessing a significant drop to 39.5 for 35 to 44 group and then rose to 46.7 in the oldest data, which had a smaller percentage than the youngest ones.
Turning to Australian women, they took physical activity less than men in the first group (15 to 24), which accounted at 47.7. The period, however, saw a noticeable growth for the number of taking physical activity at 53 in 55 to 64 group before tailing off 47.1 -a larger percentage than men held on the oldest group in this statistical data.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
How many Australian people in percentage...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: '-the the greatest'.
Suggestion: -the the greatest
...over 65 group. This was started at 52.8 -the greatest proportion of Australian men figure-, w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, regarding, then, well, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1003.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 204.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91666666667 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76659562033 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 106.607317073 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602941176471 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 297.9 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.4926829268 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.7871764725 43.030603864 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.166666667 112.824112599 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.0 22.9334400587 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 5.23603664747 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.418970094471 0.215688989381 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.225687082762 0.103423049105 218% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875414900783 0.0843802449381 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.29068443852 0.15604864568 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0992212703497 0.0819641961636 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.2329268293 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 61.2550243902 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.9970731707 142% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.0658536585 145% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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