We venerate loyalty- to our school, employers, institutions, friends- as a virtue. Loyalty, however, can be at least as detrimental an influence as it can be beneficial one
since our childhood we have been taught about loyalty. Our teacher, elders, parents, everyone taught us that loyalty is a great moral value, a person who follow loyalty is a person of good character. Loyalty is being considered as one of the trait of good character. Aformationed statement states an aspect of loyalty which compel us to get introspective about the goods and bads of loyalty. The statement acclaims that we venerate loyalty to our school, employers, institutions, friends – as a virtue. Loyalty, however, can be at least as detrimental an influence as it can be beneficial one. The ...
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Sentence: But if the president stays loyal to the Christianity norms he will be bitraying his country.
Error: bitraying Suggestion: betraying
Sentence: It will be detrimental for his country as the enmies wil invade the country if it will not be protected by its army.
Error: enmies Suggestion: enemies
Sentence: In the same way being fanatically loyal towards dogmatic and orthodox thinking is harmful for society, it deteriorates and impede the development of a society, government and consequentialy whole world.
Error: consequentialy Suggestion: consequentially
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No. of Words: 517 350 (less words in real exams)
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Score: 6.0 out of 6
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 517 350
No. of Characters: 2476 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.768 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.789 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.763 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 177 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.148 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.994 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.593 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.471 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5