The sports professionals earn great deal more money than the other professional .some people believe that is justify while the other believe this is unfair.
whats your idea?
To be frank, there are 2 groups people who have professions that earn an enormous fee: the professional sport players and the cinema professional actor/actress that we are not going to consider it in this essay. Some people believe that this amount of money are justify for sport players where as some like me find it unfair.
Through the last century, professional sports, specially football has taken a strong position in the world. Millions people assemble in a unique country every 4 years for the Olympic or world cup. This is an excellent opportunity for companies to advertise their goods while the economy of that country is changed by tourists. So the sport can be a good income for many people. Besides sport matches have been the only important happen that could reside a temporary peace in world war 2. Also, sport players always be an idol for juvenile. The style of players and even their hair cut is imitated by people.
Although the sport has an essential role in world, in my opinion the deal of the money is unfair. because I think there are many vital professions may be not very popular like football but important enough to make changes in the world. Border free medicines and UNICEF employees who help people whole around the world in hidden. They help children and people in poor country and the lands involved with war. Not only they give food and drug to undernutrition children but also they try to change their life style in a good way.
In sum up, I believe it should better companies investigate on more worthy jobs than a hobby like sport profession and pay more attention while more money to people who really try to make a better world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 263, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'justified'.
Suggestion: justified
...e believe that this amount of money are justify for sport players where as some like me...
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Line 1, column 289, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
... of money are justify for sport players where as some like me find it unfair. Through...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...pinion the deal of the money is unfair. because I think there are many vital profession...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...stigate on more worthy jobs than a hobby like sport profession and pay more atten...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, really, so, while, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1386.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71428571429 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45180298321 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557823129252 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5761146021 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244166414426 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738055264962 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854729893326 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167610170912 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105069415698 0.056905535591 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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