Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Parents give birth to childrens and make them strong enough to face the world. Some of them keep their children around themselves and teach them personally while others let their children explore the solutions to the problems by themselves. According to me, parents should make children independent as they will have to be some day and it is better to start from early ages.
There are many oppurtinities that a person could get if they were made independent at younger age. Take for example the increasing percentage of extroverts in the teenagers in the eastern contries. This is mostly because the parents there are now letting children to figure out their lives at an early age rather than keeping them cooped up and do not let them have the exposure of the world. Personally being a young adult myself, I can attest to this result. The reason being my cousin brother whose parents do not belive in letting him face the difficulties by himself is less prepared to face the world than me according to me.
Also upto some extent the care of a parent is needed by a child but after the sometime, the children outgrow thier parents and this growing curve should not be hindered by anyone. Parents could be the reason limiting a child's growth so there should come a time where the child should detach from their parents a little bit and start to become dependent on no one.
The outgrowing is the main reason behind the so called increasing generation gap as after certain stage the knowledge inflow stops from the elders and if not to learn about things around ourselves then why are we even living. Take for example the growing technological stuff out there. No doubt the kids these days are teaching their parents but that only happens if the children learns this stuff by themselves as they won't be getting any learnings from their folks.
So I strongly reside by the view that the young adults should live on their own once they have outgrown their parents
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 242, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...olutions to the problems by themselves. According to me, parents should make children independe...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e the world than me according to me. Also upto some extent the care of a parent i...
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Line 5, column 313, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...hild should detach from their parents a little bit and start to become dependent on no one...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, while, for example, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1628.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71884057971 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36519963051 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544927536232 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9568144489 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.285714286 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6428571429 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78571428571 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231901774377 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829997196036 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526918879118 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142611875489 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453213421618 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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