Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The statement argues that governments should support major cities financially for their role in generating and preserving cultural traditions. The statement can be challenged both from its reason and its claim.
Under the influence of globalization, major cities become more homogenous and gradually lose the authenticity of cultural tradition. China has witnessed a fast development since the 1980s, especially in large cities. Nowadays, cities such as Beijing, Shanghai, and Guangzhou share the common traits as a result of modernization -- high skyscrapers, big shopping malls, and busy central business districts. Even the famous historical sites in large cities -- the symbols of cultural traditions -- somehow become the tools of commercialization: expensive tickets make the cultural tradition as one-off consumption, and souvenir economy thrives on making money from tourists. People can hardly learn anything because they need to rush to see as many historical sites as they can to make tickets worthwhile.
On the other side, small cities and rural areas may preserve the cultural tradition better comparing to large cities. For example, it is common for urban people to go to funeral home to hold a ceremony to memorize the passed away. However, only in rural areas can you see the old tradition of Chinese funeral: within seven days after the death, people from everywhere gather together to hold rituals -- performing Chinese opera, crying for the dead, and holding parades to memorize the dead. Because of the relatively slow modernization, people in the rural areas are more likely to live in a traditional way that cultural values and cultural rituals persist. Thus, the reason that large cities primarily generate and preserve a nation's cultural tradition may not hold solid.
Besides, the claim that governments must ensure the financial support of large cities may be speculated in several aspects. While major cities have large populations and contribute heavily to the national economic growth, it is not reasonable to argue that the government should prioritize the need of major cities. As the amount of financial support is limited, the guaranteed satisfaction of the needs of large cities may sacrifice the needs of underdeveloped areas, which leads to a further increase in developmental gaps. It is the government's responsibility to create an equal and stable society rather than create the imbalance. Another reason to oppose the claim is that major cities provide more job opportunities that may, in turn, boost their development as a result of large-scale development. Comparing to large cities who are more likely to self-sustain, the rural areas or small cities are in more urgent need of governments' financial support. For example, the money for large cities to build a new governmental building may help a bunch of villages to improve their school facilities, recruit more qualified teachers, and support more students from low-income families to go school. Thus, it is important to develop a more comprehensive criterion for financial support to adapt to the complexity of societal development rather than to simplify the circumstances to ensure the development of large cities.
In sum, I strongly disagree with the proposed reason and claim because it oversimplifies the developmental issues that a nation faces. While large cities do play an important role in a nation's development, it is hard to justify that they primarily contribute to the generation and preservation of cultural traditions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 589, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a traditional way" with adverb for "traditional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...the rural areas are more likely to live in a traditional way that cultural values and cultural ritua...
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Line 5, column 728, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
... cities primarily generate and preserve a nations cultural tradition may not hold solid. ...
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Line 7, column 537, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...crease in developmental gaps. It is the governments responsibility to create an equal and s...
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Line 9, column 186, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...e cities do play an important role in a nations development, it is hard to justify that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, may, so, then, thus, while, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2993.0 2235.4752809 134% => OK
No of words: 550.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44181818182 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01115333436 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 947.7 704.065955056 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7364436105 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.045454545 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370743690503 0.243740707755 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116339367593 0.0831039109588 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806716422457 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202342118398 0.150359130593 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511862251378 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.1392134831 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 100.480337079 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.