A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The statement argues that a nation should offer a standardized curriculum across areas before students enter the college. I strongly disagree with the argument because it oversimplifies the educational contexts.
First, students may possess different cognitive capacities across different regions. Developmental psychologists such as Piaget discovered that there may be a universal cognitive developmental pattern from concrete thinking toward abstract and possibility thinking. But later researchers found out that there are individual differences in cognitive development, which can be largely influenced by environmental factors such as the school environment, teacher's interaction and peer relationships. Thus, the learning abilities of students may vary across different regions as a result of educational inequality and developmental differences. For example, children from Beijing present higher abilities in communication skills and reading abilities comparing to children from a rural village in China because they have more opportunities in participating reading activities and speech contests as result of rich educational resources. If a nation is going to design a standardized curriculum, the first question is that for whom the curriculum should be designed and tested. Different samples may yield different curriculum design. It is hard to design a curriculum that fits all.
Second, the standardized curriculum may hamper diversity of the society. Students have different interests influenced by their developmental contexts and previous experiences. Imagine that a nation implements a standardized curriculum before college, it is expected that students may be likely to choose similar majors when they enter college as a result of standardization. If a student may be fond of music, he may not be able to pursue a career as a musician because he spends most of his time on the national curriculum and his interest in music cannot be further nurtured. What's more, a required curriculum cross K-12 may not even foster the possibilities of interests as students undergo the same learning experiences since young.
Standardization do have advantages. It is convenient to compare students based on their performance on the same curriculum. It may create a seemingly "equal" competition for students from different backgrounds. But the problem here is that the competition is not equal at the beginning. One possible solution is that students may have both the mandatory courses and selective courses. While mandatory courses may be used to ensure that students share the common bases of knowledge and skills, selective courses may be used to supplement the missing part of mandatory courses according to various cognitive abilities of students and fulfill their potential based on their diverse interests.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, thus, while, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2422.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 419.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.78042959427 5.05705443957 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31597124902 2.79657885939 119% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522673031026 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 74.1410985509 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.333333333 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9523809524 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7619047619 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158866333345 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553528271022 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511699920207 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119581479022 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513876383846 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 48.8420337079 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.24 12.1639044944 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 100.480337079 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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