Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
since the beginning of this century, computers played vital role in each civilizated society. many are adamant that should be taken into consideration in order to examine its constructive and destructive facets of this matter. some people may hold the view that kids should play computers since it help to learn engilish better. However, other take a oppiside side and believe that it has some negative consequence and there should be limit of using it. From my vantage point, I concur with latter group and the lines below will shed on light my viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to mention to say is that games harm kids's academic success. there are games which is even adults like to play them. kids waste their time even without understanding how many hours passed, therefore student get lower grade at their exams.A noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistics releaved by a recent research,conduct at the University of MIT, shows that students who play computer games tend to get lower academic degree in the school. consequently, it is clear that these games have adverse effect on students.
Secondly, approaching to this issue, apart from what mentioned above, there is another subtle point which must borne in mind. Same reserch demonstrates that playing game reduces the performance of health.
the student who like to play games and attended these research have eyes problem. Moreover, these problem effect their life such can ride bike at the evening or having problem to concentrates.
To wrap up, once can conclude that computer games are significant part of our modern world. Parent should encourage their children enhancing their computer skills rather than forbidden them. I consider that computers will gain more importance in the future than today.
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- TOEFL TPO 11 - Integrated Writing Task 78
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 286.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24125874126 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65131124501 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.653846153846 0.524837075471 125% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.9918939837 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6875 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.875 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223160733337 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070483447621 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471306982317 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10559999997 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041042497722 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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