Should children be allowed to watch tv advertisements?
Generally speaking, families spend most of their times at the home to watch TV with each other. Televisions invented to bring joy and entertainment to houses and started affecting humans lives very rapidly. People become attracted to their TV shows, movies and number of TV viewers started raising every day. As a result, companies started to advertise their products and goods at television channels. People started buying things that they saw on TVs and popularity of advertisements increased at very fast rate. They started becoming more colorful and more musical. As a result, more consumers especially young kids attracted more and more to those advertisements. Some may think advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed. Some may think the opposite. They think young kids are no different from other people and advertisements towards them should be allowed. In my opinion the first one is better choice for them for many reasons.
First and foremost, advertising directed toward young kids are not fair because young kids, especially between age two to five don't have ability to decide what is good for them and what is not. They are only attracted to those advertisements colors and musical atmosphere. They are not aware of their needs and it will cause them to start thinking that those products are useful and necessary for them. For instance. my little brother sees advertisements of Legos on TV always keep crying and asking my parents to buy that for him. But he is not aware of danger of those tiny smart pieces of that maybe harmful for his age. Because he is only 3 years old and still doesn't have ability to distinguish between objects and foods. As you can you see he is only attracted to those colorful Legos without knowing anything about those small parts.
Second, advertiser and companies are deceiving young kids by advertising mostly unreliable and untruth slogans and features about products that are advertising. Children are so vulnerable to those slogans and will believe everything they see without understanding those false advertisements. For instance, I remember many years ago there was an advertisement about chocolate milk which was talking about benefits of chocolate milk for developing stronger bones and making kids taller. Kids at that such a young age will easily believe that if they drink those drinks will be taller and stronger, without knowing disadvantages of those which contains high amounts of sugars and artificial colors. As you can you see young kids will believe most things they see on TVs and are not able to find which is true and which is not.
All in all, though some may oppose my opinion it is clear that television advertising directed toward young children are harmful for them and should not be allowed for reasons I stated above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...hildren should not be allowed. Some may think the opposite. They think young kids are...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ids, especially between age two to five dont have ability to decide what is good for...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: My
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ecause he is only 3 years old and still doesnt have ability to distinguish between obj...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... distinguish between objects and foods. As you can you see he is only attracted to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, still, for instance, talking about, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2354.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02991452991 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66102089726 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489316239316 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0517054848 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0833333333 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95833333333 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21249627127 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589872600925 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776760185233 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145335132529 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785475698752 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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