In universities, people tend to concern more about the career prospect of the subjects they learn. Some people propose that students should learn subjects with a fast job growth including math, science, technology, and engineering even if they are interested in other subjects. Do you agree or disagree?
These days, the greatest concerning in the most people's mind is about their job prospect. Seeing this, many people are of the opinion that subjects taught to students must be connected to those with fast job growth, others stand at the other side of the continuum, believing otherwise. I, personally, think that people don’t be restricted to some specific matters, and they must follow what they are interested to. This approach not only will guarantee their future promotion but also will make more balance in a society's experts.
In first place, as far as doing tasks by individuals in the best way is concerned, the level of their interesting to the tasks plays an important role. Subjects in universities' classes and careers are no exception. It is possible that students fulfill their curriculum and graduate from universities, but they are not be able to deal with their career in future. Taken my sister as an example, she studied material engineering in university, even though she is interest in art fields. She always says that how she had difficulty to attend their university's classes. Most of her courses were passed by a minimum point. After her graduating, she saw herself without any skill in his field. My sister tried a lot of job positions, but, as times went, their managers fired her since she could not really handle her duties. Roughly two years ago, she changed her line and started to learn painting in a workshop. I can honestly say that now she is one of the popular painters in our city or even in our country. This experience of my sister strengthens my idea that people can be prosperous in their future jobs only if they learn subjects related to their interests in universities and take a job by that.
Secondly, considering the societies' flourishing, they need skillful dwellers in different subjects, not just those with a fast job growth. If all students in a society study the matters like technology, engineering and so forth, after a while, the society will be plagued with the lack of experts in other areas like psychology, art and so more. In other hand, it will be full of engineers, doctor, to name but a few in which there will be a lot of workless individuals. For example, in Iran around 10 years ago, electronic engineers had numberless job positions. Accordingly, many parents forced their children to enter to this area of education, and I was one of them. I graduated coincidence with many other students all of which were looking for careers. Unfortunately, before us many experts graduated from top universities hired in many job positions. In fact, our country was full of electronic engineers. In contrast, government encouraged students to choose some other fields all of which were required to complete our society's demands. I strongly believe that if we had been pulled to opt for most popular realm of study due to its great job conditions, not only wouldn't we have been jobless, but also our country would have had more balance among its adept people in different realms.
In summary, with taken all this into account, I do believe that students have to opt to studying what they are really interested in. This gives them a good chance to achieve a good career. Besides, governments will deal with all areas of a society with priceless experts.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 318, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...ate from universities, but they are not be able to deal with their career in futur...
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Line 4, column 352, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...e not be able to deal with their career in future. Taken my sister as an example, she stu...
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Line 4, column 461, Rule ID: BE_INTEREST_IN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
Suggestion: interested
...ering in university, even though she is interest in art fields. She always says that how...
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Line 4, column 884, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to paint'.
Suggestion: to paint
...e changed her line and started to learn painting in a workshop. I can honestly say that ...
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Line 5, column 413, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun in seems to be countable; consider using: 'few ins'.
Suggestion: few ins
...ull of engineers, doctor, to name but a few in which there will be a lot of workless i...
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Line 5, column 1173, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...e to its great job conditions, not only wouldnt we have been jobless, but also our coun...
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Line 6, column 272, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...as of a society with priceless experts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, first, honestly, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for example, in contrast, in fact, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 89.0 52.1666666667 171% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2750.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 566.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85865724382 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70312247334 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515901060071 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 843.3 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1381409305 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2142857143 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2142857143 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244028407297 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059657608086 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592888651096 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152082390215 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627972683857 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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