The following appeared in a memo from the Mayor of the city of Hillview:
"In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking for city council to authorize a large campaign to attract the compan and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to the giant of car manufacturing."
The author of this proposal to encourage Autotech to build its manufacturing plant in the city of Hillview offers an interesting argument but to move forward on the proposal requires more information and thought. While the correlation stated are logical and probable, there may be hidden factors that prevent city to tackle its unemployment problem
First, the author failed to evaluate the ability of unemployed people in the city. The autotech company needs employees whose are the expert in the particular field. however, if we were to learn that most of the unemployed people in the city are low-skilled citizens then establishing these kinds of companies not only cannot solve the employment problem but also increase the migration of people from near cities to this region. As a result, the author of the proposal should have done a survey on the skills and capabilities of unemployed people.
Second, the author mentioned that hillview<span class="hiddenSpellError" pre="that "></span> landfill is a perfect area for building the factory. Admittedly, the process of building a factory needs a great deal of attention and without taking in to account all the factors, it is not rational to propose a region. does this region near to the city? does this region have access to water, electricity, etc? does government allow the private sector to construct in this place? The author of the proposal should answer all these kinds of questions before suggesting a parcular landfill.
Third, introducing tax incentive by the local state needs to evaluate the budget of the government. if the government has the budget deficit, then the tax exemption policies would devastate the economic situation of the hillview. A group of people who does not have enough information about economy believes that tax exception could increase the investment and employment. however, having such a short-term perspective would worse off people quality of life in the long-term because the budget deficit imposed by tax cut can increase the inflation in the future.
In conclusion, I believe that the proposal of introducing tax incentives to attract Autotech sector in order to fight against unemployment is not rational at all. For providing the precise proposal, the author needs to conduct in-depth analysis
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1883 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.103 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.764 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.917 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.375 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 349, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... city to tackle its unemployment problem First, the author failed to evaluate the...
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Line 3, column 167, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...are the expert in the particular field. however, if we were to learn that most of the u...
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Line 3, column 550, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and capabilities of unemployed people. Second, the author mentioned that hillvi...
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Line 5, column 335, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Does
...it is not rational to propose a region. does this region near to the city? does this...
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Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Does
...ion. does this region near to the city? does this region have access to water, elect...
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Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Does
...have access to water, electricity, etc? does government allow the private sector to ...
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Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...have access to water, electricity, etc? does government allow the private sector to ...
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Line 6, column 101, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... evaluate the budget of the government. if the government has the budget deficit, ...
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Line 6, column 374, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...increase the investment and employment. however, having such a short-term perspective w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, third, while, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34426229508 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24184213775 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543715846995 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5991619051 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.058823529 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5294117647 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52941176471 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16669184882 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463894301397 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497869760174 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0954427286572 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671978220755 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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