Advantages and disadvantages of becoming an idol
Nowadays, many people the want to be an idol to take benefits for them. However,be an idol can have a lot of advantages and disadvantages. In this essay, I will discuss the benefits and dangers of to be an idol.
Firstly, to be an idol they can achieve more other privileges like modern fashion, go some country they like,... Secondly, any idol like singer, model, dancer they always perform so they can earn a lot of money from their community. like in Korea, in this country they have three big community entertainment( SM entertainment, YG entertainment and JYP entertainment) they often call these community entertainment is "3Big". Their idol always perform a lot of concert so they can earn lots of money from their community. Thirdly, if they are normal people everyone don't pay attention them but if they become an idol they can be everyone's attention. many idol they alway get attention about their fan. Actually, in Korea many famous bands like Blackpink, Twice, Red Velvet, BTS,... people always care them because they are very famous on around the world.
However, it is very dangerous if they want to become an idol. many idols they don't have their personal life, they always being someone else invaded the personal life. idol can become object of paparazzi. idol can feel annoyed about paparazzi and crazy fans. paparazzi and crazy fans they always anoy their idol everywhere. sometimes idol and take threaten of paparazzi and cray fans so they always scared. In addition, idol they always perform so they always tired and can get stress. idols they want to take a rest but they can because their community require they perform day by day so they do not have free time to take a rest or do any active they like. Moreover, sometimes idol can take a little fault but everyone think this is a big fault so they always criticized them. many idols they get criticized they can think optimistic so some idols can kill themselves.
become an idol can get a lot of benefits like they can achieve more other privileges, earn a lot of money or they can be everyone's attention. To be an idol it very good. However,if they want to be an idol they must be careful because to be an idol it has a lot of dark sides.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 7.30460921844 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 24.0651302605 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 392.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67857142857 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57715187499 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.405612244898 0.561755894193 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 599.4 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8820309023 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.4166666667 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29166666667 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227872418431 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118192644027 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0923698457412 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210538667679 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800220104729 0.056905535591 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.58950901804 79% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.33 Out of 6
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